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My Ship of Life..

My ship of life was moving

Steadily, effortlessly;

In the

Vast ocean of youth,

Enormous sea of desires;

Blissfully ignorant

Of the sharks

Lurking around;

I was singing and dancing

With sublime waves

And twinkling stars;

 

I heard an anguished cry

Shattering

The stillness of water;

I looked around

And saw a beautiful fish

Entangled in the net of life;

I moved my ship

Closer and closer

Towards the gasping fish;

I reached out

To hide it

From the evil stares

Of predators;

 

Suddenly

The blue water turned gray

The clear sky became overcast

The peaceful sea turned turbulent

Threatening me with its might;

I tried hard and hard

To free the pleading fish

From the mesh of life;

I tugged with all might

Against the hurdles

Standing in my way;

 

The barriers gave way

At last

Leaving me bruised and bloodied;

I took the dying fish

In my arms

Kissing it madly;

The fish stirred

And opened the dreamy eyes

Brimming with desires;

I heard a soft whisper                                

Invading my heart

With purest emotion;

I cried

And laughed

With the angelic fish

Holding it tighter than ever

In my fold

Singing and dancing

Singing and dancing

Never to lose it again;

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  • Lexie
    May 16
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    I liked the personification you used with the fish. Very good poem. Luved it!
    • salmanz
      May 17
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      I am extremely happy to read your encouraging words..the poem is tantalizingly close to reality..thanks again..

  • queen Greeters member
    May 16

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    Welcome to all Poetry

    Hello Salmanz

    I like how you equate life with the fish, this is very good Please keep writing and commenting

    Barbara
    Site Greeter

    • salmanz
      May 16
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      Thanks a lot Barbara...I am touched by your kind words.