Your brutal thumping tongue stab trough my soul
Beating me with words is your only goal
Your thundering terms push away my cries
I won’t listen to your paranoid lies
I’ll get up and cut you straight out my heart
No tears to follow for being apart
A life without love is empty and dry
But your loves poison will leave me to die
To save my heart from the hurt and the pain
I need a spell to bliss this ache with rain
Through the dark enchanted forest I’ll run
Find a wizard to make this hurt undone
The power of love is blissed by my pain
If I don't let go, you will do it again
Author notes
Art Work: Pontianak by *luciole
A Pontianak is a lovely lady that turns into a blood sucking man killer at night.
Thanks for reading!
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A contest entry
- Picture Inspired by Amera.
1800 points, ended May 29, 13 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Your heart is hurt. You have sought bliss. Hope you get it and get it soon. I liked the line, "A life without love is empty and dry" most. Well done.
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A masterpiece!
This is how a poem should be written... two more lines and you have a sonnet. A simple rhyming (aabb ccdd eeff) but very effective imagery; you have a real gift for words… It was a great pleasure reading your words.
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Yours is much better than mine! You have to have a chance of winning.
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wow this poem is deep it tells about love and pain that we all endure from love, i like the rhyming flow you have here, im not all that great with stanzas, you did a wonderful job at breaking this up in just the right places, i like how you will find a wizard to undo the pain, keep up the wonderful writing, -your friend Amy
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wow, this is amazing.
the picture couldn't match more perfectly with your words.
good luck in the contest. -
this is such a great write and goes so well with this picture. I loved the imagery you have used and you have painted such a vivid picture for the reader. All the best for the contest.
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Love
Sometimes love potion number 9 does not work out to well. Or perhaps love is but an illusion. Whatever it seems that in trying to find loved one always finds pain instead. Now I wonder why?
. Rewarded 4
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I love it! Thank you so much for entering my contest.
This poem is a fast deliberate read and shows the cold hard emotion set off by the aabb rhyme scheme. What a wonderful dark fantasy tale. Good luck in the contest.
Love,
Amera
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