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and love

 

 

and love, i thought,
would shatter my windows,
scream from my rooftops

it doesn't

it lingers
alone and lonely

a blocked artery
in the warm curves
of my blood streams;

waiting

in the sad suppression
of a heartbeat

 

 

 

 

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Just missing my sweetheart.......

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  • deercatcher
    July 17
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    Well I see Wanda likes it...
    Waiting is tough, yes?

  • How wonderful to read a poem by a poet who knows what it is to make a reader feel each and every line she writes, because the feelings are so tangible between fingers and between broken hearts and love. The ache is beautiful C


  • DarkangelMHB
    April 1

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    Wow

    Just beautiful work Robin. It's been a while since I read your work but its even better then i remember.


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 14
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    Heyyy, Beautiful.




  • Danny Beatty gold member
    March 14

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    outstanding work .. I was sent here by someone who loves your poetry, Night Hope ... she knows I am interested only in reading the finest poets . Now that I have read one of your poems, I must say I regret not having read you before. lines 6, 7, 8 and the final couplet are the root of this poem, and the skillful use of pause, line breaks and simplicity of the flair in this poem is stunning. I shall make time to read you often. I am not doing much of that these days due to publishing demands, but i have to read the poets of power such as you have shown you are here, and have always made a point of it, or shall not have ever written anything at all.

    I was struck profoundly and deeply by this softly shining gem.

    how utterly beautiful

    Moqui Takoda


  • jjbreunig3
    March 6

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    A touching piece...

    A touching piece; really enjoyed the construction and tone of this poem; it excellently conveys your meaning without sounding pathetic and whiny; wonderfully concieved and executed! --Joe


  • deercatcher
    January 28

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    Doesn't it ache so, to be away?
    Long time no see. Saw your comment on a Suseann and thought i'd stop by...


  • poeticweaver gold member
    January 5

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    Ouch...

    So descriptive it moves my heart, as it aches for your own. May you find peace, and the love unconditional that keeps on giving. Much love to you my friend, Timothy aka poeticweaver~


  • leander Moderators member
    September 29, 2008

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    sigh

    Unfortunately, I understand just that little bit too much what you're talking about here... With maybe that little bit of difference I'm missing " a " sweetheart since three months.

    I wasn't active during that time but finally found enough courage to come on here and live the words of my favourites...

    Actually, I'm dreadfully sorry I didn't catch this poem those few days after you've written it to try and comfort you a bit, but maybe - by now - your sweetheart is there with you again... I hope from the bottom of my heart!


    • Lyrical Soul silver member
      October 1, 2008
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      Thanks hon. Yes he is with me. Fortunately these were just the words of someone having a bad day Thank you though for wanting to comfort me. It's always good to know you would if I needed it. Good to see you again!


  • Flowergirl
    September 22, 2008
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    very nice i loved it nice write i loved it keep it up...


  • Rakerman1
    August 16, 2008

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    You take simple words and turn them into thoughts beautiful and golden.

    I feel your loneliness my dear friend.
    I miss you and hope you are well and happy
    Roses at your feet
    Raker


  • leo2
    May 17, 2008

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    I know the feeling well even though I don't know her name yet...lol. Good to see you gracing the pages of AP again.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • Dienush
    May 16, 2008

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    Wow, I can feel the loneliness and sadness and feeling of suspension in this poem... Lovely use of italics, they emphasize the message, and not one word is wasted. Very touching and beautiful.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    May 16, 2008

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    This is both sad and beautiful.
    The heart aching, the longing and the love you show here in such a tender way, make this poem sound as a soft song.
    So nice to see you posting again

  • Rowan gold member
    May 15, 2008

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    How I've missed your poetry...
    your presence. Those first two lines alone
    made me shiver.
    Stunning sweetie.

  • Night Hope gold member
    May 15, 2008

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    "waiting

    in the sad supression
    of a heartbeat"

    Sighhh...Yeahhh...what Nic said, I second. Gorgeous. I'm so pleased to read your words again, Robin...even the melancholy ones. He'll be home soon, Sweetie. How could he stay away for long? Wanda

  • Virgoan
    May 15, 2008

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    Wow! I like the hush sound of this poem. The voice missing someone loved is very well said in this piece.

    Excellent, as always.


    Keep sharing your gift.


    HENSLEY


  • Nicolette gold member
    May 15, 2008

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    Ooooh, Robin!! Only real love can make one ache like this - I know, I know, my liewe vriendin. I am SO delighted to see you writing again... you have NO idea HOW!!! I understand this one so very well...it's only the big loves that move us to miss someone this much and to express it as beautifully as you did here.

    Hope your sweetheart makes your heart run wild and loose soon again, my friend. Love you

    ~ Nicolette

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