opening each petal
one by one
the peeling
layers,
shuckered velvet,
creased along the spine,
folding the fingers
into truth
stem is taut
that bends to will
lips infused with a tongue
of colored
white- its beginning
red- its pulse
singularly beautiful
together
perfumed wash of entities
two
the perfect union
stopping time
Author notes
inspired by 'Slow,Go Slow'...Page Turner
In a list
A contest entry
- the language of intercourse and outercourse by Nicolette.
4500 points, ended June 1, 31 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Loved the use of the rose. The peeling spoke of the delicate and the discovery. This is truly a beautiful
piece with a deep sensual vision. Well done my friend.
Love, Tom B.
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This is lovely… such a slow unfolding of petals here….of both the romantic and the physical. I really liked how you’ve applied the metaphor of a rose here – it’s fresh and enticing and not everybody can do that with a metaphor that can easily become cliché.
I’ve found this piece to be very sensual but in such an elegant and understated way. I agree with my co-judge – this is striking and beautiful poetry, Chez – a perfect union indeed!
Thank you for the entry.
~ Nicolette
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i really liked the 'its beginning, its pulse' part.
quite striking and lovely.
an excellent write
thanks for entering
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Beautiful
Good luck in the contest.
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Oh it's so nice to see you stopping by my friend
Love, Chez
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Roses for your Wondrous Sway, my Friend.
You speak the language of Love, Lavishly...
"folding the fingers
into truth"
I Love that locution
Sumptuous and Sensual, Scribe.
~ Nicky♥
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Oh my a dozen of them
lol In some places that would say I am spoken for 
Love, C
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Like this a lot - especially shuckered velvet,
Wow!
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brave contest and lovely write. Sensual and soft. Your words let the reader see what the poem is about. Sometimes not an easy task.
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Not easy to describe and I have fiddled with this for a few days, an unsettling feeling for me lol...but I think I am happy with it now. Love, C
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