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slow, go slow...

Sitting atop an edifice of emotions
looking at me with pellucid eyes
sleep-soft and sure
tossing petals in a pool of pleasure
watching the warm waves ripple
across the reflection of my body

as I trace fingers down
to curve of hip from nape of neck
then travel up the vein of trust
to the heart
pause to listen with hand
sharing the soul song of

kindred spirits

slow, go slow...

I fuel your liquid leisure to measure
all the flowing love
then finger rub the treasure there
and touch your heated tongue
with Hershey kisses
melding with care while you circle
mouth to mouth partly open
waiting to please

 

If a moment could hold a touch
and play it again for me
I'd capture it with a sigh and rewind  
to touch the tender places
one by one              again and again

slow, go slow...

 

her skin reflects the meadow dew

as I breathe in her feathery hair

like a flower      as she blossoms


and some essence that burns in her
affects me similar to

the nape of her neck
which is my haven    hallowed now
almost reverent 

she could sense me now with eyes
closed                          worshipping
as I again nurture her secret garden



 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

A contest entry for:
the language of intercourse and outercourse
poetry that speaks the language of sexuality that is both intercourse and “outercourse”.

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  • pania gold member
    June 9
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    Gentle, soft and sensual, this is a lyrical poem of love shared.


  • Nicolette gold member
    May 28

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    I might make you blush, Nicky, but I was thinking of Karma Sutra while reading this poem. I liked the slow pace here, and of course the “rewinding” – therefore the title is just perfect.

    Some wonderful touches of alliteration here too and you’ve applied it very well – just enough. I really liked the romantic feel of this poem and the fact that you’ve managed to show intimacy without progression to the physical act – well done. I can see that you truly understand the concept of intercourse and outercourse. A lovely poem that is both sensual and tender.

    Thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette

  • grm
    May 26

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    you really are a gentle and loving soul, aren't you?


    this piece has all your trademark chocolate and inner gooey sweetness i've come to expect from you, done tenderly and convincingly

    thanks for entering

  • vampirebloodlust
    May 17

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    Breathtaking!

    This is an amazing piece that clearly paints out a beautiful portrate of love and sensuality. I loved from verse one and was panting by the very last. Wonderful job and good luck in the contest, not that you need it. The veiwers speak all on their own.

    . Rewarded 6


  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    May 17
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    Very nicely done. It was a pleasure to read.


  • xianariaslifetime gold member
    May 17

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    Beautiful

    I found this to be a soft flow of sensuality with grace!

    If a moment could hold a touch
    and play it again for me
    I'd capture it with a sigh and rewind
    to touch the tender places
    one by one again and again

    slow, go slow...


    Very good work!
    Lifetime

    . Rewarded 6


  • Star Shine gold member
    May 15

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    The use of liquid terms enhance this sensual write, your phrases accentuate the slowness for which you ask. So well done. Best of luck in the contest.

  • frownsnfreckles
    May 15

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    'If a moment could hold a touch
    and play it again for me
    I'd capture it with a sigh and rewind
    to touch the tender places
    one by one again and again

    slow, go slow... '

    wonderful moments of sensuality captured here, the touch is light and delicate, yet leaves a deep impression, as only the language of true intercourse can
    you have watered the secret garden well Nicky

    . Rewarded 8


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    May 14

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    Now who is capturing who with sighs? This is so delightfully soft and gentle...to coin a phrase 'you had me at hello... Love, Chez

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