i cant ever say really what i want
theres always somthin in the way your family, your friends, even the road
where far apart yes i know
but every thing i see makes me think of u each and everyday
i cant stand it any longer
baby i love you
thats what ive been wanting to say
i hope and pray
that u love me to
i know u do ive seen the way u stare into my eyes
jus to get a glimpse of whats in inside
but ill tell u now while theres nothin in the way
all i do is think of you
the way you smile
the way you look
u cant understand how i feel
ive got to much concealed
but its hard for me to show u everything
i know its hard to take it slow
but baby im already yours
i hope you see that
i hope it sinks in
i love u good night and amin
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Comments
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well theres a lot of raw emotion in this and theres a lot to be said for that... overall i think you could have used a little more format but hey thats just me. nice write thanks for entering
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thanks for the entry.
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Your use of incorrect grammar and spelling is far too atrocious. Fix this or I will disqualify your write. If you correct it, I will read it and consider it.
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very good love the last line
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This is a nice piece you have here. I feel as if it's coming right from the heart. However I'm not sure it is what I am looking for. The whole let down of a goodbye doesn't really seem to be there. Thanks for entering though, I enjoyed reading.
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great write
haha I hope this girl loves you too =]
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