Deeper is found life,
in woods
whispering,
in womb,
listening
in touch,
trembling
and in mind
remembered...
A contest entry
- Just fabulous! by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended May 14, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Deeply conceived... where you find life, the gentleness. Nice
Congratulations on the bronze.
Marlene -
awww this flows so well, and is really enjoyable to read and deep. congrats on the trophy and take care
stephanie
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Beautifully adorned... x
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This is gorgeous. You make such a major statement with such simple examples. Each is the perfect picture of depth and touches upon the most important things in life. For they are the most deeply felt.
Beautiful arrangement, beautiful thoughts.
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Very deep indeed!
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Love, C
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Brilliant! Lovely and such a joy to read! Your talent just shines in this one!!
A beautiful entry for this contest!!!
All my best to you!!
Jasminerose
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a good opening line, it sets the tone for the rest of the poem. i like the thought too of woods whispering, i imagine branches softly moving at night. the womb too, branches could apply there with the connection to mother, listening to the heartbeat. and also the touch that trembles, delicacy, apprehension, which leads to the mind, all thoughts quivering with sighs. a good poem
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