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Deeper

Deeper is found life,
in woods
whispering,

in womb,
listening

in touch,
trembling

and in mind

remembered...

 

 

 

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  • marlene47 silver member
    May 15, 2008

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    Deeply conceived... where you find life, the gentleness. Nice
    Congratulations on the bronze.
    Marlene


  • luna-midnight gold member
    May 15, 2008

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    awww this flows so well, and is really enjoyable to read and deep. congrats on the trophy and take care
    stephanie


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    May 14, 2008
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    Beautifully adorned... x

  • This is gorgeous. You make such a major statement with such simple examples. Each is the perfect picture of depth and touches upon the most important things in life. For they are the most deeply felt.

    Beautiful arrangement, beautiful thoughts.


  • Kari gold member
    May 14, 2008
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    Very deep indeed!


  • Cannonsfire
    May 14, 2008
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    Love, C


  • jasminerose
    May 14, 2008

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    Brilliant! Lovely and such a joy to read! Your talent just shines in this one!!
    A beautiful entry for this contest!!!
    All my best to you!!
    Jasminerose


  • individuality gold member
    May 14, 2008

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    a good opening line, it sets the tone for the rest of the poem. i like the thought too of woods whispering, i imagine branches softly moving at night. the womb too, branches could apply there with the connection to mother, listening to the heartbeat. and also the touch that trembles, delicacy, apprehension, which leads to the mind, all thoughts quivering with sighs. a good poem

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