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Brainfreeze

Last night I was eating a popsicle
It left my mouth cold and my brain frozen
But my heart was still warm

I thought of you, my sweet treat,
How you melted my heart
Just like that popsicle melted in my hand

But when the popsicle's gone
You'll still be here
The best brainfreeze I've ever had

Author notes

Thanks to my BFF for the inspiration

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  • David J Martin gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    Good use of imagery to get your point across. I think its great that you can convey so much in nine short lines. Original too... I've never come across this metaphor, so a good job well done. I enjoyed reading your poem.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    July 13, 2008

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    A wonderful indeed the immagery is very strange and deep ..landing here and there with love..well done...my friend..


  • Mistress Masquerade
    May 14, 2008
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    Oops. I meant write not right, this is what happens when I don't have coffee.. I just had to fix my spelling (and re-read this work).

    Toodles!

  • Mistress Masquerade
    May 14, 2008

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    This is the sweestest write I have read on here, there are great bittersweet poems but not near as many romantic sweet happy rights.