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No Reprieve



Show no mercy throw the switch
all my wrongs now rectify,
remit sin without respite
bury guilt in a shallow ditch
for whom the bell tolls midnight
reprieve none; Electrify!

Lead me to the gallows pole
for proper slipknot sentence
clemency a broken neck,
damned to Hell my fated soul
swinging from this wooden deck
no reprieve save innocence.

Bind my hands and blind my eyes
stand me up against the wall
riddle flesh to fit the crime,
as each bullet does incise
a rapid death so sublime
no reprieve I surely fall.


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  • Gwenevere
    July 27, 2008

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    Excellent writing and an interesting theme.I always worry about this kind of punishment as someone always has to pull the switch or tie the rope or fire the gu.does that not make them murderers?? I wonder, Ros


  • Desire gold member
    June 12, 2008

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    Wow!

    Wonderful weaving of words also tight rhyme
    Takes the reader through Your Mind~
    Magnificent take on the prompt...

    Lead me to the gallows pole
    for proper slipknot sentence
    clemency a broken neck,
    damned to Hell my fated soul
    These lines grab~ the images vivid-

    painful parts to inhale and for some reason I kept
    seeing men hung during the harsh times~
    The battle for Civil Rights-Human slavery
    Senseless killings~
    The crime..wanting 'human' equality

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • plainoljoe
    June 9, 2008

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    to Hell with the blindfold. Put lighted cigarette twixt my lips and let me watch the bullet I cannot hear.

    nice one, sir

    Joe


  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 9, 2008

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    Oh my goodness.... !!! this sure packed a profound
    punch... Very deep and dark.
    Well done


    Delila


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    June 2, 2008
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    Powerful write, skillfully written.


  • 2lullabyhaven
    May 15, 2008
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    Powerful write, thanks for this entry and good luck


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    May 14, 2008

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    Excellent

    Very well written, indeed. I rather liked the imagery just as it is. Hope all is going well with you.


  • PerfectImperfection
    May 14, 2008

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    A very deep and thoughtful piece; measuring the weight of guilt by association - the face to the thought; rather than any innocence assumed. Well spoken - with a great depth of imagery. Pained, and intricately woven. A dark piece of great depth. Nicely done!

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