When I see I am blind
When blind I see
World casts shrouds whilst Heaven shined
Where now my eyes are free
When closed I open to His world
Unveiled I stumble round
Majestic King by love unfurled
Where visions run abound
To perceive is pride of utter height
And the gravest sin of all
By every breath and strength of might
To keep my sight, my lids must fall
A contest entry
- to see HIM ... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended May 17, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Most Wondertful!
I enjoyed this peice. The flow is nice and steady, I felt a sence of reflection and truth of ones self. After reading this I paused and went into my own self dealings then applying your message towards me. Audrey Evans
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Ok.. how come you didn't let me know that you wrote something!!! I want to be kept up to date!!! lol..
You did such a wonderful job here.. You words created great imagery, so very vivid.. you really took the reader into this situation.. great job hun..
Angel
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Well Done !
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Humm..you took me to to your scenario..making me to see as well...the world which you are wartching and that is just beautiful my friend..thanks for entering in my contest...
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amazing and beautiful! well done
Mylee
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This is amazing!! I love your words here.
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Incredible!
This was just fantastic. The message, i dont know if its what you intended or if its the way i see things through my highly religious eyes. But the message of giving all your grief to God was awesome.
"When i see i am blind
When blind i see"
Incredible Christian tone (meant or unmeant) i loved it
God bless you
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it was most definitely meant. And thank you for your wonderful comment.
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beautiful, I hope I an right but this is my feeling when I meditate, it is is truely peaceful as is your poem.
it is quite lovely.
God bless
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A nice piece of poetry is what I see! AWESOME work! Good luck to you in the contest!!
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