Some one please save me
just save me from my misery
i sit here alone
in this cage
filled with pain
pinning me...
against the hardened cold floor
reaching inside me
gently
but silently
as i sleep
ripping my heart out of my
watered chest
of October rain
holding it in your hands
of unworthy loyalty
just letting the hole
that is now opened
slowly pour out
with my blood filling
the craved crescents
upon the soulless floor
tiny rocks
try to build a barrier
to keep
my blood from flowing away
but its hits them like
tidal waves
crushing a morning sun
of happiness
that glows from more than miles away
taking a knife
cutting my throat
licking the warmth
of my oozing blood
that graze across your lips
while u kiss it away
why are you doing this to me?
why must you torture me?
You say...
Its apart of life
that we must go through everyday
We let the people of this world
drag us down
letting depression
come our way
popping pills
to ease the pain away
hiding behind mask
to mark the scars away
pretending nothing is wrong
and that its a joyful place
were us humans should live
But its not...
its a world where we must survive
no matter what
if one dies
another is born
in that precise moment of time
life is a never ending game
it goes on and on
never to stop and think
of what is happening
no one truly knows
if the life we live
and the hardships we go through
is even real
not really...
to even see
far beyond of what lies before there eyes
to even see if it a dream
we live in a cage
filled with pain
chains surrounding it
so we never can escape
we must endure pain before we live
we must love before we cherish
we must drink or we die
and we must die...
before we even cry
But you still ask me
while a grim-some smile
plays across my face
why i torture you
and why i do these things to you
well you still haven't got it
through your head little girl
its only part of the game
I hear your words
and laugh in despise
because i never thought...
that it was only a game
of pain
But still i scream
In this cage of fear
Begging for my life
Saying...
Will someone please just save me from my misery
A contest entry
- Trapped In Fear by Sorrow is the name.
400 points, ended May 21, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make It Dark by peregrin.
450 points, ended August 10, 2008, 81 entries
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im sorry every one if this poem sounds wierd, but i kinda had writters block, and plus this is what i was feeling at the moment and time i was writting this poem.
Comments
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Good work!
I really like the piece,
wow!
Good luck! -
Really loved certain parts. It felt felt less... flow-y than it could have, but it has wonderful imagery.
Really loved the part::
"ripping my heart out of my
watered chest
of October rain" -
This is amazing for you having writers block. Wow, that's really all I can say, wow.
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wow really makes ya think
okay okay i admit sometimes life gives you pain but that's just life and that's because your alone everyone feels like that before they meet there true love and soon very soon you'll feel like me with your very own loved one keep the hope keep the faith and never give up if life throughs you hard balls get through it i asure you in the end you'll realize it was fait that made you go a different way
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...............................! Amazing!........
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I myself consider me a philosopher, this poem reminded me of....
Anyway, this reminds me of a story called the cave. It's an allegorical context metaphorically comparing a cave to the human existance. To make a long story short, someone escapes, becomes "blinded" but is enlightened to what is really out there. He attempts to go back to tell his friends, they ask him what the shapes are in front of him, and he doesn't know. So they laugh at him and call him blind and then they kill him.
Haha, how unfortunate, the enlightened one dies because he can't see the shapes that the shadow casters of society see. What a great irony, that I myself am blind. Make of that what you will.
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very interesting write....
you wrapped up a lot of emotions into this piece and it can be seen that the poem is basically an outpour of emotion
what i like the most was how (this is for me) I felt you were talking about a guy the entire time...but then u say little girl which throw things outa whack and that't interesting
2 things thou:
first fix the color! soo hard to read!
and secondly you have so many ideas wrapped into this but its just one stanza, trust me stanzas are your best friends, i dunno cuz i got lost in it, maybe that's what you wanted to do but....
otherwise it was a really good write
gd luck in the contest!
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It was great. Your poems are really good.
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......I'm sorry.
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This is a great poem. I love the way you personiphied the entrapment in the cage.
Great Work!
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good
wow grate poam
it was full of emotions
i love it almost as much as i love you
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A great poem, all though long its full of meaning and flow. Sometimes the words from our soul are the ones we most cherish, the words from inside are the ones that will always impact the most...a great job indeed
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I'm Speechless
I'm Speechless
This Poem Is So Good
I Already Liked Read It 5 times
Thanks For Entering
And Good Luck
don't Worry You don't Need Luck
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