Dig into my heart with your fingertips
Hold on as tight as you can
For we will be embarking on a journey
the one we started, when this all began
Brush my soul with your whispers
Tell me the things I want to hear
because I know the truth
and it's the truth I have to fear
We will meet actuality with our mouths open
we shall ask them for all the advice
just to know if there is something better
we wanted answers, answers even more precise
Clutching at the sky above with our arms stretched
when fate speaks it will tell us the only fact
We knew this is not what we wanted to hear
But in the end of things we were still intact
Author notes
Advice is what we ask for when we know the answer but wish we didn't.
I know it doesn't really fit,
but that's what it made me want to write.
In a list
A contest entry
- quote prompt with a twist by Midnite wolf.
770 points, ended June 2, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was an honest and mind provoking poem.
Advice is good, even if it isn't what we want to hear.
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I just realized I won something on this poem.
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this is a beautiful write, a great take on the prompt, thanks for entering
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It's all about choice, isn't it? Wise words these.
~ nicolette
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Amazing
It's amazing how we ask so much of other's and their opinions and how often they count towards something. Someone other then yourself is always going to be the most brutally honest because afterall they see you in your truest form.
Thank you for writing this with all it's genuineness and thought provoking collection of words!
Best of luck
~Star
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This is a delightfully serious look at how we choose and then rationalize. We even try to get the world to vote for our decision, even when we know it is wrong. Clearly stated and well said.
Love, Tom B.
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Great imagery, this was really different, and each aspect is truly i think what we feel when we ask for advice, its not always what we want to hear, but its necessary. You did a great job on getting this across without being too cliche and overusing the same words, great job! i enjoyed this a lot!
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really beautiful with mature feeling in it....
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this was excellent. something in this that really stood out were the lines "Tell me the things I want to hear
because I know the truth
and it's the truth I have to fear"
I think that is true for a lot of people
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This is soo amazing!
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THANKS whoever nominated my poem.
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That's incredibly awesome! I really like it. Great job!!
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That was amazing.
So sad and honest .
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a good poem and a very good entry
i wish you luck in the contest 
your poem is worthy to be read so wonderfully written and your rhyme and words were smooth flowing
good lucks
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another good poem and good advice, even if we dont want to hear it best of luck! Vickie
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A beautiful poem. So true.
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that's WAY amazing.
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Thank you very much!
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that's amazing.
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perfect in every form!
(not just one word.. yeah?)
Anyhow, i liked the first stanza.
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Thanks megs.
I'm going to
call you that..
around your friends.
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your quote is - advice is what we ask for when we know the answer but wish we didn´t
good luck . have fun -
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Thanks, I finished it.
But there might be some
mistakes.
I loved the quote by the way.
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