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~Quoting Memories ~ ( Silver )

Veins of discontentment

Flow rivers of endless bitterness of tears,

Reap though the pages,

the story of my life.

 

Lone in crowded rooms,

Company faces, fade,

Words are only echo's,

blur into insignificance.

 

Shading hides the colours,

Haze of Sunshine's warmth,

fade within the storm clouds,

shrouds the covered mind.

 

Within netting,

Traps laid ready for my footing,

to take a tumble,

and fall.

 

Brush away the cobwebs,

Hands of art once vibrant,

grasp the memories,

only to become power within the dust of hate.

 

Soulful the sorrows that bleed,

Claret of wine poured a single glass,

Drowning pity,

swallowed near choking.

 

I see....

 

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"I never knew I would look back at the memories and cry."

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  • Midnite wolf gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    of course another fantistic write, you aren´t capable of anything else, i love where you took the quote, thanks for entering, x


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 16, 2008

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    Sigh.. been looking into my life again hun?

    This is absolutely one of my favourite writes of yours... power, desolation, confusion... just fantastic!


  • e m i l y
    May 15, 2008

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    Oh my,
    This was fantastic.
    I loved your take on this quote!
    I could feel the rush of several emotions.


  • Mallig gold member
    May 15, 2008

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    Amazing piece, that ending is so powerful, and the feelings of being less than part of things, in a darker version of your own life, are so well conveyed here. Bravo!


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    May 15, 2008

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    WTG Julie---Excellent take on the prompt!!
    Favorite stanza is:

    "Lone in crowded rooms,
    Company faces, fade,
    Words are only echo's,
    blur into insignificance."

    Good Luck in the contest!!


  • Roaddog Wolf
    May 15, 2008

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    true that

    you can't let yourself be dragged into the quagmire by the swamp and its easy to do if you don't focus on life around you instead of meandering through the blur of wallowing in the trap of self pity that is like the after shock of deceit that rocked your world to begin with. Yes "see" , you already saw now see things new. good write


  • aboomer silver member
    May 15, 2008

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    Very well said; sad but so relatable!
    I really like,
    'Lone in crowded rooms,
    ...
    Words are only echo's,
    blur into insignificance.' I think so many feel alone even when they are with someone.
    'Brush away the cobwebs,
    ...
    grasp the memories,
    only to become power within the dust of hate.' Powerful image!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • mistiman
    May 15, 2008

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    That is desolate ... one sad bit of writing which given the prompt is perfect but oh so sad! wheres my tissues xx


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    May 15, 2008

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    Great take on the prompt and yet another fantastic write from you!!! Best of luck in the contest..it looks gold to me!


    Linda


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    May 15, 2008

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    I can relate. Many times have I felt alone within a crowd. Or within family. This feeling, I am sure hits the majority of us. Your feelings really came across strong in this one Julie. Beautifully-written. Good luck in the competition.
    Love
    Wayne Leon
    x


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    May 15, 2008
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    hugs..! great job..


  • daviscth silver member
    May 15, 2008

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    This is a wonderful response in answer to your prompt sister! I just love the title. Good luck in the contest.


  • Angelflower
    May 15, 2008

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    Many of us can relate to this so well.. you did a wonderful job hun.. Your not alone in the thought that love has given up on you or the other way around..Though you may feel like it sometimes..
    You did a wonderful job with the prompt hun..
    Best of luck..

    Angel

  • Bob Fox
    May 15, 2008

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    Alone

    alone in a crowed room. wow many times I have felt that way. Perhaps it may be the rejction we face when we offer up love. Sadly your words are somewhat beautiful and yet you open up to the world. A brave and wonderful write. Never give up on love my friend


  • Midnite wolf gold member
    May 15, 2008
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    prompt time - i never knew i would look back at the memories and cry.
    have fun, good luck

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