a glistening tear
almost forming in her eye
as I hold out my hand again
and a smile emanates
from her saddened face
for she knows she is
forgiven.
A contest entry
- Short and sweet, based on a prompt....make it memorable! by Charity Ann.
450 points, ended May 21, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think!!!
Comments
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Thanks for fixing it!
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PS--you misspelled saddened.
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amazing write! i didn't think a poem so short could be so full of emotion...but you just about made me cry with this one...good luck in your contest
peace, love, & cheese -
Wonderful
What a well express choice of words for the prompt. Best of luck in the contests.
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Well, this is just delovely! I lovvvvvveee it. I wish I could write like this. You are so good, and impressive. KEEP GOING! You will go far here. I loved your poem, it is now my fav.
Shannon
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Aww that is just lovely! Well done for the prompt 'beaming'... to forgive is so freeing. Love this poem!
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Wow, what a beautiful and moving picture of grace in action through forgiveness. I love it.
"A glistening tear, almost forming in her eye"
Grace is powerful stuff. Thanks for the great write and good luck in the contest.
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