It was a day for laughing,
a day for keeping sweet underbrush
from cluttering corners,
clogging depth;
it was a day when eyes met
and wind chimes lilted fresh on spring breezes.
His smile came naturally,
words holding an air of authority.
There was no pretense;
only me in my farmer jeans
with an old rake and a sun hat
withered from sea air and last summer’s beaches.
I felt my smile release with simple small talk,
his forearms flexing as he took my rake,
insisting on swifter movement.
(I would recall that moment and reflect.)
My task was set to gathering
and we spoke of hyacinths and azaleas;
planned daffodil circles
and rhododendron hedges – and other things
that flirted warmth
to liven a spirit.
His sketches fluttered
on the glass-topped table within gazebo walls,
plots scribbled with penciled swirls
and straight lines;
me
flat back within the inevitable embrace,
gasping in the salty taste of lust pressed hard;
language heard and diligently spoken,
in the earthy scent of fresh loam and spilled seed.
A contest entry
- In Conversation with by NurseChilly.
1400 points, ended June 15, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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a day for contemplation and reflection... a very nice gentle write, with some lovely lovely images. Many thanks for entering this contest
G.x
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Sometimes after reading poems like this all I can do is smile. Thank you.
Love, Lane
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Wow nice write. It's like a memory with dad or grandpa as a child or maybe even mom or grandma, haha. Good descriptions and imagery. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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Yes...
What a splendid piece of poetry you have weaved hereThe imagery is filled with vivid colour and tasteA truly remarkable penning indeed
LOVED IT and thanks for sharing
Best of wishes to you.
Tony
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oooh..Now everyone will want to take up gardening! Great piece of writing! End line is stellar! Best to you in this contest.
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Outstanding poem that is full of vivid images and the language is very seductive and at the same time quiet and sweet. Good luck in the contest!
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wonderful imagery here so much the way a day might be when work and pleasures blend and discovery is in the air... wonderful writing here...PK
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Sounds like quite a day that you had here Pamela!Interesting this latest work. GOOD ONE!
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Oh my, this is an earthy sensual masterpiece....
me likey.
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oh this sounds like a most unforgettable day. what a wonderful scene you have painted for us here
Outstanding.
Delila
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I can see all this. The fresh spring day, the anticipation of spilled seed and what it might produce.
...roses, that's what it'll produce.
Paul
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