the note read
like a poetic piece
only overshadowed by the darkness
of what lie on the floor
skin tight
and
light blue
body turned to concrete
which will eventually
be turned to dust
this note however
will live forever
an angels last words
to a world she knew
she could never spread her wings in
the evidence bagged
heart sagging in chest
as the report got written
one Caucasian female
27 years of age
suicide
Author notes
-Concrete angels and suicide notes. prompt...
A contest entry
- PIF Do Angels commit suicide? by Danneh.
375 points, ended May 19, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Woo, I love how you made it so matter-of-fact like an objective witness who sees these tragedies too often, and that it's the note (the written thing) that gives life and immortality to the woman. Man, that's pretty sad though ... more life after your dead seems like a shitty deal
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Wow!! This was great, and perfect for the prompt. Good luck in the contest.
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