drawn in by swirling reminiscence
before rising, to a pristine state,
caught by an undertow of human frailty
but fighting, attempting escape: to become like them,
under cover of midnight romance -
reality melts slowly from thoughts and from existence,
approaching glacial insanity
in a whirlwind of chaos on this night of demons,
attracted by a copper scent
of scarlet, dripping irate seduction,
retracing silk fingertips
in the deep violet shadows of evanescence
beneath dark linen, in risqué pose;
betraying evening attractions
despite whispered assurances of grace,
for though beauty is everything
in a melted state of mind,
night drifts along, a healing comforting familiarity
as the knowledge of all right and wrong
conforms into an apathy,
radiating forgotten intelligence:
believing only for the cause of salvation
but ignoring cries of question;
diving into that sweet sedation,
mesmerized by spiraling colors
only accompanied by intoxication,
longing for a means of egress
but only finding misleading affliction,
surrounded by a lustrous brume
this longed-for saccharine haze
loved by so many who lust for the desensitive;
all which has been hoisted to a delusional pedestal,
for those who abscond from all reason,
all which should be left well enough alone...
delving deep into the realms of the unknown
searching tirelessly for the next great emprise
to unleash all hell unto the ends of the earth
without thought or consideration given what might come
humanity has taken a final step towards destruction.
Author notes
I wrote this originally for a POD contest, but since I wanted to jazz it up a little and add the "no-no" words and a background, I redid it. Hope you like it, I did!
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option 16: against society, humanity, warnings of foolishness, etc.
A contest entry
- Wow Me by Lord Bob.
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Comments
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I love the vocabulary, and the spectrum of the piece. I think the very first stanza is my favourite.
Thank you for entering, and good luck. <3
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Great imagery...I always spell that wrong...but anyway, great poem, I like the fact that it made me pick up a dictionary, lol.
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I loved the word choice, but my mind didn't really follow it as much as i think it should have. I'll probably have to come back and re-read this a bit later.
Thanks for following all of the rules and entering my contest! -
wow
This is really really good. I absolutely love your word choice and there's some outstanding imagery in there. I wish I could've written like this at 15!
The only thing I didn't like was the title and personally I would add a little more punctuation here and there. It's not wrong, but it's occasionally confusing.
... brilliant though!
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