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Spinning Wheels


It's about feeling a sense of continuum,  dry
turbine twist in your gut,  when you think
of places,  faces of people you've met,  stories
you've read,  and how things seem to be lacking
real substance.  Or maybe,  it's over time
that you acquire a calmer willingness to
forget more common things,  like how many times
you've walked this way to work,  your neighbours
occupations,  (then names),  and find you care less
the more you get to know.  How it eventually
seems we all boil down to an interesting rumor
or an unfortunate event,  all set down in a small
town,  so much like the one you grew up in
it has you thinking in circles.  Then your daughter,
this beautiful-blue-eyed stranger,   walking beside
you asks,  What is the purpose?  And,  all of a sudden
you're a skinny, white Oprah telling her how to live
her best life,  while trying to steer her away from
thinking how you don't live like that.  Deep down
you want to say,   how you've let life become
a stale continuum; a white lab rat caught in a maze;
and you're too damn stupid,  lazy,  and fucking
afraid to do anything but.   She knows it, but won't
say it today because she's broke, and needs you

to pay for her habits,  and her wheels are spinning...

 

 

 

 

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  • Malabu
    May 16

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    well you certainly spun my wheels...but little do we realize we are much apart of the makeup of who and where we come from...resistence can sometimes be temporary...

    though we seem to drift in differen directions....the roads are many...which way do we go?

  • paulh45
    May 16

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    Bleak. I think there are some very, very hard truths at the centre of our lives. It takes as always courage to confront them. And what happens then? Immediately, we are no longer "too damn stupid, lazy and fucking afraid"

    Love ya.
  • grm
    May 15

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    i was watching Kid Rock on Letterman, and he said he was worried that his son might rebel and grow up to be an attorney. lolol
    which got me to thinking about 'perspective' and how it is SO different from person to person, and how we all deem what is 'important' to oursleves in ways not many can understand or relate to.

    i grew up with no greater ambition than to be the polar opposite of my father...which is probably the rule of thumb as far as kids and parents are concerned.

    i like this prose of yours...it has such depth and detail, and illustrates what goes on in your mind.

    though, i dare you to recite it all in one breath at your next poetry read. lolol

    good stuff, you


    • Rowan gold member
      May 16
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      Did somebody say dare?
      I'd just have to drink more coffee, is all. lol.
      Thanks Guy.

  • Nicolette gold member
    May 15

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    So true... how comfortable we become in our comfort zones. This is a subject that keeps me awake many a night. Real life piece of writing this is.... I was wondering, shouldn't this line "your a skinny" be "you're a skinny" ?

    Great title... made me think of wheels within wheels and how we struggle to escape routine. I almost want to shout out to someone "let me keep the hunger"... Great writing, Kathleen.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Peteskid gold member
    May 14

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    do the lab mice know its all a game...seems we do and yet it seems to make little difference, finding a rut and sleepwalking, then passing it on...things we simply accept...wonderful depth here...PK

  • Brilliant! Love, C

  • "...and find you care less the more you get to know."

    Ain't that the sad truth. It's an epidemic with no really known cure. I don't know what sends us down the apathy highway, but we all walk the white line at some point, not saying it's good or bad to walk it - it just "is".

    Great work here hun.


    • Rowan gold member
      May 14
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      Thank you.

      Sometimes, life overcomes, overwhelms... just a moment when you walk; taste, smell, feel.

  • dehydrated
    May 14

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    Deep down
    you want to say, how you've let life become
    a stale continuum; a white lab rat caught in a maze;
    and you're too damn stupid, lazy, and fucking
    afraid to do anything but.>>> ...anything. But she knows...????

    a part of it scares me and a part of it shows me how things really are in reality. well, i never keep quiet when it's time for me open my mouth in front of my mother, but i know a lot of people who do. i am just glad that i prefer not to get too philosophic with ammu, because she is toooooooooooo cute and non-philosophic. lol.
    i love the way you started this, it actually felt like "circles" were building inside my head. love the images and the list of names, places... you deserve gold. i promise


    • Rowan gold member
      May 14
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      Open your mouth, hon... nothing you could ever say would surprise her. lol.
      Loved your comment, thank you my friend.

  • Dalaney gold member
    May 14

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    Damn. What a good good write this is. One to be bookmarked, my friend. I particularly like the part about how we seem to care less the more we know about people. This poem would be a great topic for a fun little debate. Love, Lane


    • Rowan gold member
      May 14
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      It's so easy to say what you think others need to hear, but much, much harder to actually live it, don't you think? Thanks Lane!
  • lol, I love 'skinny white oprah' .. that is a classic description. Trademark it! Ahem..

    Love the train of thought. Makes me think how easy my stomach drops when I think of people I wasn't expecting to remember.






    • Rowan gold member
      May 14
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      hehehe.
      This definitely was a train of something... thought, or wreck, I haven't decided. Thanks hon!

  • Jersene silver member
    May 14

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    oh, my, this is good...really good...my wheels are now spinning, and I can't think of anything that would even show how much I relate, and like this. It simply speaks, breathes life...very heartfelt penning


    • Rowan gold member
      May 14
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      It was heartfelt, and I'm glad it got your wheels spinning. My daughters habits are much more harmless than mine though, she just loves to shop and spend.

  • Allyce May
    May 14
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    ! My taxi has come to pick me up!

    BUT I SHALL RETURN!!


    • Rowan gold member
      May 14
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      a taxi? We don't have a taxi here, lol. Just a handi-cap van.

      • Allyce May
        May 14

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        Ohhhh, that handicap van suits me fine; I will feel more at home in there, heh heh

        Anyway, the was extremely prose-ish; I usually find that even your prose is poetic. This: not so much, but I am liking it! It's stark and does not beat around the bush while remaining inventive.

        "and find you care less
        the more you get to know. How it eventually
        seems we all boil down to an interesting rumor
        or an unfortunate event"

        I am definitely feeling this! Sometimes things just become so much - after repeating itself in your head again and again and again - that you find it easier to just not give a shit; because most of the time it does boil down to the same old thing. I can sense the frustration in this, Christ, I have cried it into the bath myself on many occassions.

        Life can be such a viscious circle, more so when it breeds boredom.

        You might have guessed I love this

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