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The Fire Spirit

A flash of light shoots across the sky,

Of red, orange and gold.

 

"What's that, mummy?"

A little boy says.

"Why, that's a shooting star!"

His mum replies.

 

She glides effortlessly over oceans,

Over forests, over mountains.

 

"Look at that!"

One girl says to the next,

Peering out of their tent.

"Come on, look!"

 

Ahh... almost there,

She thinks to herself.

 

"I've finally found you."

One man says.

"After all these years of waiting,

You come back."

 

She flies over her volcano as she says,

"A perfect night to be flying."

 

"Now, just a little closer"

He prepares the net,

"I've only got one shot at this."

He throws.

 

She hits the ground hard,

Fiery sparks exploding out from under her.

 

"Perfect."

He says,

"You should make a lot of money

In the auction."

 

"No! You can't do this!" She says,

Drained of all her energy.

 

"But wait,

Yes I can!

I have captured you,

Now you are mine!"

 

"I'm no-ones!"

She shouts.

 

"What are you doing?"

The net erupts into a ball of fire.

He jumps back,

not knowing what to do.

 

She flies back up into the stars,

Wild, free.

 

 

A true fire spirit.

Author notes

Was originally going to be about a phoenix, but then I decided to change it into a fire spirit.

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  • Dead creature
    February 19
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    Beautiful just lovely


  • Blood Bloom
    June 13, 2008

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    Wow. Your an excellent writer. I love the fantasy in this, and the image I see while reading this poem, it's interesting and magical. Bravo, and keep the ink flowing!


  • I Am Gun
    May 28, 2008
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    i like this you did a really great job... i enjoyed reading it...smile!!!


  • Esgon Rashak
    May 28, 2008
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    YOU WERE WRONG!

    its actually pretty good story


    • DawnKestrel
      May 28, 2008
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      Okay... If you say so... But I still think I could have done better.


  • Sagerider
    May 20, 2008

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    I Like it.

    Late one evening I stepped out to see a flare streak across the sky, going from south to north at high speed. Red like a road flare and I would guess at one to two hundred feet in the air. I have no idea what it was and have always wondered.

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