Sweet breath! The breeze that warms the night,
A star from some forgotten world long gone
That glimmers full of silver, crystal light
And waits awhile before she journeys on.
The starlight is a gift from long ago
Until the constellations fill the sky
With merriment, like thoughts that overflow,
Until we wonder where or how or why.
The lonely night moves darkly like a song,
An ocean full and vast, an open book,
An avenue of dreams that roll along,
Our eyes are open if we care to look.
The furrowed night will softly fall asleep,
In seas of velvet black both old and deep.
A contest entry
- Magic in the Silver Moon by Lone Defender.
500 points, ended May 19, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh, I love your choice of words here! Very nicely done! Love your background and contrast also. Lovely...
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Nicely done, and easy to drift into ...I love it.
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EVER SO BEAUTIFUL!!!!!
Oh how did I ever miss this one! The night and its amazing wonders do bring sweet and beautiful dreams to us as we lay down to sleep.
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Scrolls Rolls and Roles
The darkling night's moon mirror rolls along
above an ocean vast or open book
whose leaves, when skimmed by those who care to look,
weave tales which surge surf merge, resurge anon.
On wine lees' seas old Homer sung so strong
dwell for a tide, while we abide, life's brook
still flows from source until fate's finger hook -
last call before forgotten fall's doom gong.
Remorse, reflections, [w]hoops of joyful song,
unanswered questions, love's sad tale forsook,
life's challenges that heedless Lethe took,
stay hid, brook neither write nor right, nor wrong.
One night, forgotten, masks more second states,
pearl moon springs pregnant strings of pearly gates.
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Your poetry is always so beautifully written, and this is full of wonderful imagery. A lovely read.
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This leaves the reader to inhale the night with the wind to their face. Stars blink and the mind absorbs the laugh an ocean curls on the shore. Take in the darkness in glimpses soft and tender, with slow hands to share this moon. The creativity leave the reader with chills on the spine.
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Very pretty. You write the best nature poems! The background is too light for the romantic nightlyl beauty of the poem though. Best of luck in the challenge.
Lovely as always.
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What a lovely wondrous verse! So many feelings and such imagery...very nice. Thanks for sharing! And best of luck in the contest!
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a good piece, strong opening words with 'Sweet breath!' for that sets the tone right away with smiles i think. ah warm nights, we have had a few of those lately. i like the reference to history with stars, light, with a gift from long ago. a hint of sorrow there with loneliness in the night. aye to open eyes, if we would only take the time to see. the repetition of the opening two lines works well here i think, not right at the end of the poem but close enough to impact.
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