The sun descends beyond the oak
And slumbers in a lazy glow,
The silver moon yawned and awoke,
The darkness threw her velvet cloak
While daylight hours seemed long ago.
And then I'm drawn to spend my hours
In misty woodland far from men,
Bewitched by the night-scented bowers,
By fairy feet and lily flowers,
Where midnight weaves the leafy glen.
And though the woods seem dark and cold,
I'm warm inside, my soul is glad,
I'll stay until I'm worn and old,
For here so many tales unfold,
My spirit blessed and far from sad.
The willow looks more tired than fair,
Nostalgia tells me time is short,
The kingly oak without compare,
The witching hour that calls me there
And still I go for I am caught
Where whispers soon dispel despair.
Author notes
Room without doors. This is inspired by Longfellows poem Changed
A contest entry
- Inspired By Longfellow by cerridwen.
550 points, ended May 17, 2008, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLDS 4 by Swan song.
2500 points, ended October 25, 2008, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very well done i am so greatful for such talented writes in this contest
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Brilliant!
heh, never read anything like this especially nature as the subject, I tried once and yep, it failed...
KEEP ON WRITING!!!
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Excellent
Wonderful creation for the contest. So very well done. Congratulations on the gold.
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I am the satyr in the woods..beware! lol!!
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Description led the reader into the wood while night craddles fairy and lily flower in the glen. The wood dark and cold the narrator is comfortable to remain as a blessed spirit. The willow tree appears tired while the oak stands tall, and whispers dispel despir. The strength and flow here is well deserving of the gold thophy. This is enjoyable the first time read or on re-read. The rhyme fits the target of the mood.
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FANTASTIC!!!
Off to the woods and their magical scenes, such sweet dreams of faeries and such they bring to us each night!
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Magical poetry
to me as a nature lover this is an ode to it, Pictures are so vivid and descriptive that I waited to meet some of dryad too. Perfect!
~Sonja~
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I love this. My favorite lines in the whole piece are: The willow looks more tired than fair,
Nostalgia tells me time is short,
The kingly oak without compare,
The witching hour that calls me there
And still I go for I am caught
Where whispers soon dispel despair
These lines flow (like the rest of the piece) like water in a stream. It's beautiful, it's nostalgic, it makes me feel longing for things long gone in my own life. You did the inspiration piece much justice.
Thank you for entering.
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My lady
Your pen weaves some wondrous tales and beautifil images. It is alomost like one is drawn into a cascade of beauty and wishes only to stay. Fabulous as always. Continue on and take me with ya next time
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jasminerose
27 minutes ago
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Edit | Reply Always flawless flow and rhyme combined with vivid imagery!! This one is enchanting and casts a spell itself over the reader! Such a beautiful tale of nature!
A very lovely piece!!!!
Linda
Jonathan ROBIN
7 hours ago
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Edit | Reply Witching Hours
The witching hour that calls you there
has drawn me in, within the glade,
I'll there remain and mock despair
for, faced with fair, time and shade fade.
chiefmac
1 day ago
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Edit | Reply Wonderful rhyme. This is great ear to sound aspect and works so well off the tongue. Great ending and second stanza. This is an enjoyable fun read for the reader to catch magic in the woods and sooth the spirit.
Puppydog
1 day ago
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Edit | Reply SO DREAMY!!!!!
I agree! Nature is able to bring out our inspiration and dreams! We go to our fantasy land as we stop and let all of God's beauty surround us.
going nowhere
1 day ago
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Edit | Reply your rhyming is always done so well... and in this, i feel that no matter what surounds me, i can rely on who i am inside and hold onto that amidst any strife that may arise... it gives and almost home sweet home feeling... no matter what or where or whom you call home.
individuality
1 day ago
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Edit | Reply a good rhythm and flow here, rhyme too - and a good sense of atmosphere throughout, steady and calm though dark and light dance in between each other in the branches of mind.
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