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Scented Breath of Rosemary

I heard the faeries speak

in scented breath of rosemary

and daffodil and clover woven tresses;

fragrant rose clouds seemed to spell my name

-in familiar hand of calligraphy, with gentle touch of love-

a momentary picture then I saw of you

the way you must have been before;

before your earthly form, before mine,

you showed me where the bridge is Mom,

and I know you'll call me when it's time;

in scented breath of rosemary

and daffodil and clover woven tresses.

Author notes

picture credit: Jesse Earle [photobucket]
dedicated to my mom [I found out this past Christmas morning that she had passed away suddenly in my birth country 3000 miles away.] Just trying to deal with it and believe that she is in a beautiful place. BTW, youmay disqualify [there are more than 10 lines] but I could not get around it

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any critique is very welcome [as long as it is done with courtesy and constructive to my learning. I thank you.

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  • Stuart Higginson gold member
    November 2
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    An astounding picture, and this piece both compliments and complements it, Reenie. I'm sorry for your loss. Just catching up with my favourites-list for the first time in a while, and knew it had been some time since last I passed your way. The title drew me in ~ I love rosemary, and calligraphy both. I liked the folklore-ish early features in this, and how you took it beyond the temporal to the spirit of the sky.
    A fitting tribute for a loved one.

  • thoughtsforu
    September 21, 2008

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    You words speak beautifully for your mom. Sorry to hear of your loss. You wrote with alot of imagery. I loss my mum also and the pain we suffer never goes away but life goes on as they wish.

  • myagirl
    August 8, 2008
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    Thats just a brilliant piece of writing.


  • PerVirtuous
    June 22, 2008

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    This is a very wonderful tribute and a fantastic take on the prompt. You have very strong intuitive and endopathic skills which you share in a well thought out manner. A winning combination. Have three more bunnies.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    May 29, 2008

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    beautiful~

    Oh my
    Beautiful sis and it tugged at my heartstrings as well
    Love the imagery you have in this one and love the pic as well.....
    I am so sorry about your mom...
    My belated condolences...
    Congrats on the silver...
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • Desire gold member
    May 18, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Scented Breath of Rosemary
    It's ok if a few lines over ten for it is ten more or lessNo worries there You are just fine
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading~ which I did several times...I for some reason was being shown a llama...but an ivory one~
    like this signifance of ancestry and family bond...
    and being shown clams...but pearl ...it is like...clams...one message and then pearl in shell another
    However it is like the making of the pearl...being shown
    Nudged to mention...You...like You are the pearl~
    and tried hard to decipher but was getting what sounded like: Hollandaise
    being shown a box planter...like one on the window sill...after reading Your words...seeing hands touching the soil but seeing what looks like special soil...there are ivory beads
    or a special type of ingredient added~hearing what sounds like:
    Like Gold~ which could be a metaphor also
    Hopefully this makes sense~
    I am sorry for Your loss
    Powerful images You have brought forth

    These lines grabbed and pulled~
    -in familiar hand of calligraphy, with gentle touch of love- momentary picture then I saw of you
    the way you must have been before;.
    Magnificent Voice spoken~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~~*~


    • cherche -d -ame
      May 18, 2008
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      OMG

      I am left speechless by the things you menyioned becoming a vision for you. Each and everyone have plaed a role in one way or another in my life as of very recent.The Llama was only a conversation, an ivory letter opener was given to me very recently. This person knows my love for elephants and how I abhore their horrible fate [hence he said that the gift was given to ME, for I would always reasure it for the simple reason that I know and feel what a pachyderm must have gone through for this to saisfy someone's need to possess it at all cost, but that I would see it differently and I do. Being that it was my son who gave it to me....I treasure it for that reason as well as the spirit in which it was given to me. BTW, it was given to him....he did not purchase it for he knew how I would have felt.A week ago I cried bitter tears over a seemingly lost pearl earring of mine [I found it]and clams.....well a pilot friend of mine brought us a clambake meal on dry ice from New England...wit corn and lobster etc [all in one pot] something very popular in New England.I also transplanted some of my lucky bamboo plant ibto a buddha container with soil mixed with tiny rocks of ivory color and golden specks
      Just wondering about the deep psychic images you got out of this poem [especially as it does not mention any of those things] You are no doubt an empath that sees way beyond of what is there and I also thank you for your words of comfort. Please know that you are very special to me [even though we are not in touch a lot]. I belive we are in a different way [by way of the unity of our soul]
      much love
      reenie

      • Desire gold member
        May 18, 2008
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        I am elated that the message made sense and boy was I having a tricky time trying to just pass it on where it made sense for I was hearing the info in several different languages~
        shown in my frame of reference also but interesting You mentioned Buddha container
        The images I was seeing flashed so fast that I had to try and type what came through
        It was like playing charades but subliminal too

        The Love so strong from a female energy that I was having to use like a translator so to speak to help with this female energy for there was many tears of Joy~
        but also excitment showing me so many things...I was like huh I was seeing her hands...
        and You know I was wondering why I was seeing my page when I had the Elephant Totem Spirit Guide pictures
        I just changed it before reading the contest entries
        Oy~~ I am still learning...how to take short hand notes Congratulations on Your Trophy win Sweet One


  • Rowan gold member
    May 14, 2008

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    My condolences; how hard that must have been for you to not be there. But this shows how love is its own continuum. So beautiful.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    May 14, 2008

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    This piece flows from a stream of knowledge into the ocean of art and emotions, poemizing the conclusion of a mind that listens to a wise Soul... and so I have learned from a profound reading. Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to in all of your endeavors. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use dear poet.
    ♥ Touchof1der

    • cherche -d -ame
      May 18, 2008
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      Kimberly, thank you. Your words mean a lot to me [especially that you understood} as I think of this as a sort of way out of the box write,
      always,
      much love
      xoxoxo
      reenie

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