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Don't Let Go

Missing image

Dreams of shadows

passed in my slumber.

Haunting images i seen ,as

darkness fell covering

the daylight.


 

 

I was thought broken.


 

 

You came to me with tenderness.

Was i still dreaming as

time stood still?

 I woke to blue velvet

eyes.


 

 

 Released in your carress.


 

 

Suddenly i knew

you awakened me.

Pushing the blackness away.

Sunlight casting softly

on my face.

 

Your presence became

my reason,

 to relearn love.


 

This voice resounding whispers.

No rush i am here.

 

You were never broken my love.


 

I cling to this generous love

may i never forget.

The precious heart that told me

in honesty.

 

 

I did not need to be fixed

I was never broken.


 

Don't let go...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    July 31

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    "You came to me with tenderness.
    Was i still dreaming as
    time stood still?
    I woke to blue velvet
    eyes."

    Perfect. That was my favorite stanza of all. The ending was strong, and the entire piece so utterly beautiful I could almost feel the passion dripping off the pages. VERY well done!


  • crazymomma
    July 27

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    I can totally relate to this one. I thought I could never love again then I found my true love and my heart felt whole again. The imagery in this is amazing and wonderful. Thanks for entering and good luck

  • Viyanna Rosemarie
    June 28

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    awesome write and message

    I did not need to be fixed, I was never broken.

    what an awesome thing to realize about onesself. xianira (?) sent me your link and said that i would probably enjoy your writing. if this is any indication of what i can expect i will certainly be back for more of your talented expressions. thank you for sharing this with me tonight and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. congratulations on the gold trophy that you have earned with this wonderful write. viyanna rosemarie




  • CodysPrincess
    May 19

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    I normally don't like this style of a poem, mostly because I can't comprehend them, but I enjoyed at least, the message of this poem, and it helped me a little in my own dilemma with my boyfriend. Great job and good luck

    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      May 21
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      WOW!

      I am so honored by this win!!! I am glad it helped you with your dilemma. I feel very humbled at the moment.
      Thank you very much hun!!!

      Love
      Lifetime

      • Xianaria gold member
        May 23

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        Well done, my Love~

        I wanted to leave you a lil note to let you know that I am proud of you in this accomplishment! I really enjoyed this and am glad you got the gold!

        Your Xianaria

  • JessTheRentyMess
    May 15

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    wow. this is very unbroken. it flowed and was complete. i could see a picture in my mind and it was beautiful. i loved this peice truley.

    ~Jess~


  • silverfish
    May 15

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    well, now. delightful and sinful indeed. i like the unbroken theme, like your poetry and rings, it sums up the eternal quality of love. i think you and yours should get room. you're steamin' up my pond. -silverfish


  • Xianaria gold member
    May 14
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    Like the soul of this poet, beautiful

    My sweet Lifetime, your words have greatly moved me. I love how this expressed your deep feelings & I do like the movement from broken to non.

    The love you now embrace is unbroken and I am blessed having you in my life! With my blue velvet eyes I watch over you, in my arms you are safe, with my heart I protect yours.

    I won't let go.

    Your Xianaria

    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      May 14

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      Xianaria

      My love, this was written from my heart to yours.
      You bring out everyside of me, laughter,love, sensual and a feeling of well being and peace.
      Your words have touched my soul.
      You won't let go, I wont let go.

      Your
      Lifetime
  • ian sawicki silver member
    May 14

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    a good opening, sadness flowing right from the start i think. a softer note then with the tenderness section and more dreams swirling maybe. and then the light of love shiens, i like that you start dark and move towards the light. a good poem.



    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      May 14
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      individuality

      First, Thank you for taking time to read my poem.
      Yes, i did take it from dark to light because it's true to where i am in my life at this time.Where i was before was not pretty.I have was lucky enough to get a second chance.
      Your commment means alot to me.
      Best wishes,

      Lifetime

  • Spiritual Soul
    May 14

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    Welcome to Allpoetry!

    I love this, you wrote this with such feeling and love. Learning to love again, a topic that seems to written about over and over again, but I loved this, it was original. I am hopelss romantic too, so I loved thi!

    Keep it up! If you have any questions, feel free to ask me!

    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~
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    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      May 14
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      Spiitual Soul

      Thank you for taking time to read my first write.
      It's not really my first,i have been writing on paper for awhile.
      Oh yes love has been wrote about so much but where would the world be without the greatest of all (Love).
      To all us hopeless triping over our feet to find it! lol
      Best wishes,

      Lifetime
  • Bob Fox
    May 14

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    Relearn love

    Only can a poet write of such things. Love, the main topic on here sadly. But a fine write. Beware of the many players for they can suck you in


    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      May 14
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      Bob

      Thanks for reading.
      You are the first to comment and its appreciated.
      Sorry i am a hopeless romantic it seems. lol
      Although i have a darker side too lots of sadness sometimes.
      I will take your advise and watch the players.
      Thanks,

      Lifetime
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