She beautifully stood
dressed in classic black
with heels of paten leather
Hair all in place
twisted up in a french twist
earings of silver
dangling close to her white skin
A clutch purse held tightly
as her brown eyes wander
looking around her in a silent
womanly way
Long black gloves with tiny buttons
giving her petiet short sleeved dress
a finishing look like no other
Then he arrived with a smile
ear to ear as he got closer
to her
She too was smiling
it has been a long time coming
her heart beat so loudly
she began to blush
He put out his hands to her
with a greeting well over due
she grasped his hands
In that instant they saw each other
both in love so deeply
her in classic black
him in blue jeans and a tee shirt
Yet they matched
love see's only what it wants to see
From the inside out...
A contest entry
- The BEST and origanal option contest that could ever be out there so please enter now cuz my hand is about to fall off from typing ALL this...THANK YOU!!!~ by SmartBrick.
300 points, ended June 7, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I really liked this piece. It was sweet, simple in words but heavy in heart and meaning. I'm really glad I stumbled upon this piece. It's a great write.
Peace & Love, Lyzie
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Congrats on the bronze!
A wonderful tale of love, beautifully penned. Congrats on the bronze
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Sounds like the typical love story relationship: beautiful woman, an heiress to all money, and then the guy, scruffy but adorable...and broke. Needlessly to say, as much as I like your descriptions, this comes off as a bit cliche. Like I've heard it somewhere else before. Sorry. But it's still good nonetheless.
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So sweet, I really liked this poem and the descriptive imagery as well
Very good
-GL in contest -
I really liked this!But what option is this under?Anyway besides this i REALLY loved this poem.It reminded me "Hollywood's not America" with the blue jeans and all.This is one of my FAVORITE poems.But it can be better...all you have to do is tell me the option number!THANK YOU MILLIONS FOR YOUR ENTRY!I LOVED IT LOTS!~
SIGNED CONFUSED
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This poem rocks. It has great imagery and great flow. It also tells a great story. Wonderful work here. Loved it.
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i would love to love this poem, but i already sneered at the first verse,
She beautifully stood
dressed in classic black
with heels of paten leather
I can't see any woman as "beautiful" when wearing a dead animal.
gross..
sorry, but you wanted to know what i thought, and i couldn't get passed the dead cow on her feet.
xoxo,
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this was absolutely beautiful. i loved the purity of the love in this poem. you desplayed it in a unique and exquisite way. i have never read anything like this. awesome job!!
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blue jeans and classic black, i like it , thats all it takes to fall in love , xxpeter
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What a sweet love poem. I liked it. So romantic; it actually made my heart go pitter patter! Thank you for sharing.
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Wow what an amazing write! So descriptive and full of emotion. I so enjoyed reading, good luck in the contest
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"love sees only what it wants to see..." how very very true. Love your entry, and thank you. Lane
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