Your Broken Heart
I could not mend,
The game u played
Was so pretend,
We were in love
You and I,
So all those tears
I wasnt ment to cry?
I wasted time
not trusting you,
Now im stuck
have no clue,
Should i take
one more chance,
Try and let
our love enhance,
Im scared of what
might become of me,
If this just
wasnt ment to be,
The pain i just
wouldnt be able to take,
But maybe this time
ill be the fake,
Make u fall
how i fell,
Put you threw
My Hell.
Author notes
This poem was one i rote after i broke up with one of my boyfriends =[ so enjoy
If u could change any part of it what would it be?
Comments
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The rhyme is so forced. While the poem flows slightly well, it's often inconsistent and the rhyme throws it off, and your spelling/grammatical errors are distracting, too. In order to write good poetry, you should read good poetry. Find a poet you like and read his/her writing religiously. I recommend Plath and Lorca, but you can find a lot of good poetry and poets at Oldpoetry.com.
-Cristina -
well written
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