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Together Forever

They say my lover passed away,
It’s true I feel my broken heart.
He’s gone to make a place to stay,
where we will never be apart.

It’s true I feel my broken heart,
for I’m afraid to be alone.
I know the love that I impart,
will never be a milestone.

He’s gone to make a place to stay
where we will spend eternity.
I talk to him when e’re I pray
and feel the love he has for me.

Where we will never be apart,
is where I know I’ll be someday.
He’ll make for us a brand new start,
my lover never passed away.

 

 

 

Author notes

Earthstar, I like Nyetta know exactly what you are going through. You are not alone and when you leave us, you will rejoin him. God Bless you.

Retourne:
Like so many other French forms, the Retourne is all about repetition. It contains four quatrains (four-line stanzas), and each line has eight syllables. The trick is that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes do not have to rhyme.
Form source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • earthstar
    May 27, 2008

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    your are right my heart feels broken. some day we will be in heaven. There an empty feeling in my heart. I do pray to God to tell him that I still love him. Thanks you so very much.

  • Paula Pears
    May 15, 2008

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    Such a beautiful sad and yet hopeful poem. If I had lost my lover this is what I would want to be told.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    May 14, 2008

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    Indeed, in the context of the whole, the passing of a loved one is but a brief moment, as when reunion does raise its joy the time seems but naught. And the step into reunion is as easy as stepping over a spilt rail fence into another pasture, filled with wildflowers. Once you do, you never glance back for all which is important and meaningfull lies ahead of you in yon tree line.

    Very, very VERY lovely write Amera



    Dad


  • RedAquarius
    May 14, 2008

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    Heartfelt and lovely, this form lends itself to the message you are conveying. Simply beautiful


  • StarEyes
    May 14, 2008

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    I do believe I know who wrote this lovely write...
    But It is perfect! What a wonderful entry for this contest!! Thank you soooooo much for it!!

    Best of luck in this contest!


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    May 14, 2008

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    oh sis such a powerful write a love related poem that talksss much expresses much


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    May 14, 2008

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    This is one of the easier French forms that I can get my head around and you do it so beautifully. You words make it flow and a joy to read.

    All the best in the contest.

    Love
    Sue


  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 14, 2008
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    perfectly penned and with sentiments certain to be appreciated. Lovely as always.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    May 14, 2008

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    Excellent!

    A perfectly inscribed piece here, true to form, Bravo!
    Thanks for sharing Teach, and all the best to ya in the contest!

    -Timothy


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    May 13, 2008

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    So very bittersweet and beautiful...*sigh* Best of luck in the contest dear.


    Love and peace always,
    mj.


  • PerVirtuous
    May 13, 2008
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    So well stated. You were the perfect poet for this job. This is wonderful. Standing ovations.


  • Faeryn
    May 13, 2008
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    Excellent, Amera. I love the last stanza.
    Love,
    Tay

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