the cloud breaker: she used
supernatural judo smack to the sky
sifting her guru's immaculate heart powers
into breathable textured compassion.
baked polenta in the oven and
got the milk from the utter,
grinned with broken teeth, beyond
the purple bruises of her hipbones.
she expected perfection. and she
wasn't subtle or naive. she
turned a soft hand at us when
we knitted too slow, she laughed
operatically and much too loud for
most public settings. but we clapped
our hands and rolled our eyes like
any good daughters would. we shielded her
from our most private secrets and
tracked her technological advances.
we remembered her birthday and she
kept the sunshine on our faces.
Author notes
i feel it. got AP exams coming up myself.
my mom is being funny today. she gets a poem.
A contest entry
- and the orchestra plays on by autarky.
750 points, ended May 30, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I think this is a beautiful poem for your mother...in a well written, contemporary way, too...congrats on the gold...very well earned
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love the shape. and of course, the poem itself: it's really sweet (as much as I hate that word), great images, great lines. I've got no critiques.
thanks for entering! -
-haha, i remember ap exams. take as many of them as you can.
-i love the formatting
-while taking a shower today, i realized i had two fairly huge bruises on my left pelvic bone area. and it hurts when i put pressure on it.
-wasn't subtle or naiive. she
one i in naive.
-operetically and much too loud for
operatically?
awesome-ness, really.
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uuggghhhh you write so well. so well. RAR!
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you
are
so
ama-
zing
it
is
not
fair
as usual i love the poem. more than love.
and the shape business is pretty damn cool too
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"beyond
the purple bruises of her hipbones.
she expected perfection. and she
wasn't subtle or naiive. she
turned a soft hand at us when
we knitted too slow, she laughed
operetically and much too loud for
most public settings."
awww, this is beautiful.
and so true.
i love it
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