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Overcome

 
Side to side, left to right
You're a sucker punch
I was once mesmerized by your very presence
Now all that's gone away
The shimmer and the sparkle
Has become my black and blue and grey
If you just tell me that you love me
I'll hide it all away

Just don't leave me, don't walk away
Are you gonna be like everybody else?
Everyone I've ever known
Just ups and leaves
Like I'm a house for sale
So darling, what will it be?
Oh, but what did I tell you?
What did I tell you!?
Get your hands off me!!
You know what never mind
This isn't what I had in mind
I am tired of being your compromise
Selling my soul
Just to hold onto your lies
This was never me
What have I done?
What have I become?


Today, I walk away
Right now, I overcome
 

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  • movedon
    July 26, 2008

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    I was once memroized by your prescence. but all that's gone away.....So often we find ourselves memorized. But sometimes, we're so memorized we can't see whats really going on.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    June 7, 2008

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    so much bursts forth from this, so much..Emotion expressed so well on your part..and the read came through so poetic too..This touched me I was able to truly feel your words

    :0


    Cin


  • tortured-heart
    June 5, 2008

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    beautiful as usual...you stir up my emotions more and more with every write
    peace, love, & cheese


  • X...
    June 3, 2008
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    this could be a song hehe. made me mad at one point till i read the last two lines darn you hehe.


  • Xmas16
    June 1, 2008

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    This is a very well written piece of work. I
    did enjoy some of the repetition to give emphasis to your feelings. It was a very good poem and had great word choice. It made me feel that pain you must be going through and how hard it is to overcome something like that. Great write!


  • ButterflyforChrist
    May 31, 2008

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    Woah

    THis is great... Emotion packet... Love the wrods used... Great impact...


    ~Bree~


  • Nothing But No
    May 29, 2008
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    This is absolutely brilliant. Best of luck in the contest


  • buffsab99
    May 22, 2008
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    Excellent

    Great take on this prompt. Best of luck in this contest


  • Xx Emo Teddy xX
    May 15, 2008

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    i really like the sentence structure of this peice..each stanza strong then the other..i really enjoyed reading this


  • Lady Australis silver member
    May 14, 2008
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    this is really amazeing
    well done!


  • Mistress Masquerade
    May 13, 2008

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    1. I love the back ground.
    2. Your word choice is fantastic
    3. The emotion jumped out and practically bit me
    4. I love your writes.

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