Entwined in your web
of wanton wiles
I drown delightful
in seductive smiles
Author notes
Prompt: "Pleasantly tangled up in you"
13 words
(hehe...)
A contest entry
- Boom It's a Quickie! 11-13-20 by markgrif.
300 points, ended May 13, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Excellently done, sister. You are indeed wonderful at working with with the little. (OMG! Did I just type that?) HOw about with working with so few words... (Ah... That's better.) I wish I can work with small things. LOL (I'll stop!) Write on and congrats. One.
Dez
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As soon as I finished reading this I knew there was going to be gold on the page long before I scrolled down. Flawless flow and rhyme. Beautiful!!!
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so sweet!! Congrats on the Gold! Keep up the great work.
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What a great take on the prompt! This is beautiful, congratulations on the gold.
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sweet! Well deserving of Gold, congratulations
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wow hun! Great take on the prompt. It is so sad, and so full of imagery and emotion! Great write. Congratulations on the Gold!
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hi that is a great job. you deserve the gold. keep it up.
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Boy you make me wish I could be entwinded in that guy's web!
"I drown delightful
in seductive smiles"
Chills!!
Very deserving of the Gold!!
darlintlc
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a very catchy phrase and it doesn't feel cliche'd neither, very good.
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awww this is sweet and so true. Well, its sweet depending how you look on it.
great job
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Congrats on the gold!!
Aww this is a sweet one. Gorgeous rhyme, a fab 13 words, not easy to do, I know but you make it look a breeze! Superbly penned
Congrats on the well deserved golden nugget
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I can see why this one won gold. The flow of the words here is amazing. Such seduction in those words written here. I can feel your emotion within them. Well done on your trophy Kiwi.
Love
Wayne Leon
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he he indead! Your words flow so beautifully! Great poem and congrats on the gold!
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I loved the flow and choice of words here! Definitely deserving of the gold! Congrats!
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Oh this is just perfectly pleasureable!!! Excellent choice of words and love that it rhymes too!!
Way to go Jackie!! Congratulations
Linda
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Well, I am not surprised at all that this took the Gold!! Wow - so much said in so few words!
Excellent!
(and Congrats!)
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My Sissy is HOT and doing it up RIGHT!!!!!
Congrats again!!!!
I bow....
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hehe thanks sis!!! Yay got my muse back and been writing today
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Outstanding!!
Perfectly worded to tingle the emotions of your reader. Can feel the pleasure of the entanglement. Congrats on Gold! Don
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congrats on gold auntie~!
i love you -
Well worth the win! Excellent
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Sweetly decadent, really nailed the prompt, Great poem.....
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Came back to reread this awesome poem.
Damn your good. -
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Me thinks you need head checking
heh.. aww.. thanks!
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Wow another gold huh....awesome ..
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aw how perfect...No wonder this one won gold...it would win any reader over SiS
Love it, congrat's
Cin
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Check you out! Congrats on the gold, well deserved! Brill write. Seductive smiles eh? Is that the
coming out? No more sweet and innocent haha xxx
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Very clever Jacks...that's my girl, and congrats on the gold hon.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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Congrats on gold!
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That's what I'm talking about!
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Hehe
I like a lot!! You are definately on a role tonight hun buahahah! Keep writing, your muse is taking you very far. Beauiful imagery with seductive smiles and wanton wiles! Treasure to read
Good luck in the contest
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ha! You nailed the flow too!
This reminds me of that ummm, dying in your sleep while ughm ... exercising ... yes.
Good Show ...
Steve
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AWEE... THIS IS SO SWEET...
Love this. best of luck
Delila
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Beautiful flow and rhythm here....love it!
all the best!
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Excellent
Excellent job with this prompt. I love this part
drown delightful
in seductive smiles
Amazing. Best of luck in this contest
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