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Back Road Blues

I been walkin' down these back roads hopin' for a ride
Just walkin' these back roads hopin' for a ride
An' if she won't have me back, guess I'll just hang my head an' hide

Now I been pacin' round this motel room
Whisky bottle in my hand
Just pacin' up an' down th' room
Pourin' whisky fast as I can
Been on my knees prayin' for comfort
'coz I don't have none at hand

I been crawlin' down these back roads, crawlin' 'til I bleed
Just crawlin' down these back roads, until I weep an' bleed
Just like Jesus in the garden
I been prayin' to be freed

I been hidin' in the shadows, an' hidin' from the sun
I been hidin' in the shadows, waitin' for salvation to come
May as well be locked up in prison
For all the bad things that I've done

Gonna walk these back roads forever, 'til I am insane
Gonna crawl just like a beggar, 'til I don't remember my own name
An' I hope she realizes that I won't come home again...

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dtsreetpoet

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  • Midgetbridgey
    May 30, 2008

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    I will comment once the contest is nearly finished
    best of luck
    plx comment me
    -midgetbridgey
    love the title


  • rhyana
    May 21, 2008

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    i really liked this. could almost "see" and "hear" it being performed in my mind's eye. would've won if the contest criteria were "most lyrical".

    the repetition emphasized nicely without being obnoxious, kudos for managing that. no feel of being bludgeoned by it.

    thanks for entering! i was definitely entertained.