A voiceless dimensions form behind our backs
as though our time became frozen in cold silence
eyes that no longer find one another
are easily distracted by any motion
this passionless abyss swirls wildly
pulling everything that was us
into negative zones of dying matter
The omega of love is reached,
Speechless in each other’s presences
we become incoherent shells too each other.
Author notes
Prompt:
Ignored
A contest entry
- Quicke 10/10/1(Prompts Are Up) by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended May 14, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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great
i think itd sound a lil better with ''one another'' as the end two words instead of ''each other'' i dont know y it just fits
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Very good write here bro. i love the concept and the flow. Congrats on the bronze. Keep up the great work.
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Very nice. I like your flow and subtle use of internal rhyme and near-rhyme.
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This is great
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wow this was an awesome piece of writing my friend form start to finish
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just letting you know, you have overnight.
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