i stand in the street that separates the two of us & think-
this is how we'll die,
five feet away in
different galaxies.
& this i know
is highly melodramatic
a car [black] slows down
and waves [the driver] &
smiles [the car] & says
"how are you? i didn't see
you in church today,"
but i don't
say anything. all i can notice
is how the interruption is
just tall enough
to cover you &
the expression
& the clothes
i know you're
wearing.
i blame technology
& technicians
& oil for
all my problems & i swear the sun is eating,
is eating.
"no. i wasn't there"
i admit & "I am sorry"
& I was sorry &
I really, really was.
but the monster wasn't
there- had driven off to
call for help- because
there were things
that we & us couldn't fix.
& for a second
you were still
there; still
smiling, your mouths were
moving & I knew
that you were
choosing to
say goodbye.
"it's alright"
the voice was
saying, & there
were ambulances
playing.
& you
were barefoot since
it was summer--I'm guessing-
[june.]
Author notes
this is almost too emotional for my liking. for the fucking love...you see what happens when you mix personal feelings with poetry?!
hell yeah I goddamn miss it.
A contest entry
- don't you miss it at all? by hilly.
300 points, ended May 17, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i could go on and on ... i added you as a favorite... i am reading all your stuff... but no time to comment thoroughly or even what i want to say... work sucks like that... your work is amazing... thanks for sharing it...
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wow, i just realized who this was. i guess your style has changed a lot since i last read your stuff. i should stroll over and catch up on what i missed. sorry about that.
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i like that you described the interruption as "tall" and the 7th stanza is beautiful, especially about the sun "eating." great stuff. although i will say, [these] make you seem young. i don't like them. i think they disrupt flow.
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whoaaaaaaa.
killerkiller. bookmarked to be read again.
a car [black] slows down
and waves [the driver] &
smiles [the car] & says
"how are you? i didn't see
you in church today,"
but i don't
say anything. all i can notice
is how the interruption is
just tall enough
to cover you &
the expression
& the clothes
i know you're
wearing.
that was my favorite part.
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lol, thanks. Emotional stuff...blah
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This is very emotional, and very well penned. I expected no less from you.
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