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The Beach

The sun beats down
It's hot, yellow rays provoking my thirst
As I am walking along the beach
The sand is burning up my bare feet
 
I try to look up into the sapphire blue sky
But the sun's rays
Are like fire burning up my eyes
When I reach the crisp, refreshing, salty ocean water
It feels good against my burning hot toes
 
As I look out far beyond the ocean
Into the horizon
I wish that that moment of beauty
Will last forever
While everything else
All my troubles and problems
  Slip away and leave me in this moment
For the rest of my life

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  • queen Greeters member
    May 23

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    Welcome To All Poetry

    This is exactly the way i feel when im standing on a beautiful beach. Well done poet

    Please keep writing, reading and commenting

    Barbara
    Site Greeter

  • celadia
    May 13

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    Love the images in this poem, I used to spend a lot of time at the beach, too, I miss it now, but I can definatly understand this wonderful piece.


  • bubble Bob
    May 13

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    I like it

    Great picture! Peaceful picture. Nice poem,hard to read though with the the blue font,might want to change that. It's a nice read but doesn't really flow smooth all the way through, about line 11 is where it gets kinda choppy. The first to last line is really choppy too, might want to replace the word "Go" with "slip" or something to that effect. I really enjoyed reading this though, thanks alot for sharing your work!