veins flowing
with molten heat
searing your name in
scorching intensity
of passion's flame
I cry out
"burn baby burn"
Author notes
10 poets
20 words
20 minutes
A contest entry
- 10/20/20 ... quickie... come on!!! by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended May 13, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Gorgeous. Straight-forward and passionate, indeed. Last lines were a surprise, but wouldn't be as good any other way. Great piece!
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Wow
nice write sis 
Well done 
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Yeah! Oh this should have won gold in my opinion.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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Very cool. It used some of my very favorite pyro terms, and it reminded me of Johnny Cash's "Ring of Fire"..... and I am a big Cash fan! Nicely done!
The last line also took me to "Disco Inferno", another song I always enjoyed.
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LOVE THAT ENDING!
Nicely penned.
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Thank you Mark
Still trying to get around to commenting on everyone.
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whoo-hoo. Hot! Hot! Hot! Who is this special person? Best wishes!
Shana -
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Now that would be telling
Thank you for the comment and good wishes
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Quite a hot write you have here whew it's getting heated up around here lol Wonderful!!
Linda
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Damn!! Love that ending!! Smoldering with passion and heat! Love it!
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I'm melting..............
great write.... good job and good luck in contest..... hugs to you....!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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