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My Valentine Has Hollow Eyes

The sun sets on this bloodstained scene
Beautiful in its own demented way
Half alive and half in someone else’s dream
I kiss goodbye to this my last day

I just wanted to love all my life
But it has always been stolen from me
To lose my misery on the tip of a knife
Is the kind of woman that I should be

This flesh may be weak
But the soul is strong

Why must I be condemned this night
When all I try to achieve is delight
My valentine had hollow eyes
With the moon I rise and with the sun I fall
And for his kiss I would risk it all
My valentine has hollow eyes

I could spend my days basking is his beauty
And not a second would be a waste
This is not passion this is not duty
Just the worse addiction with the sweetest taste

He makes me wish I was a worthy being
More than this frail and mortal flesh
A kind of soul like god that is forever seeing
Our soulful murders when still fresh

This flesh may be weak
But the soul is strong

Why must I be condemned this night
When all I try to achieve is delight
My valentine had hollow eyes
With the moon I rise and with the sun I fall
And for his kiss I would risk it all
My valentine has hollow eyes

Cold as ice and sharp as blades
Those eyes could resurrect
This is a power that never fades
Painfully simple yet horrifically perfect

This flesh may be weak
But the soul is strong

Why must I be condemned this night
When all I try to achieve is delight
My valentine had hollow eyes
With the moon I rise and with the sun I fall
And for his kiss I would risk it all
My valentine has hollow eyes

Author notes

Dedicated to Pete
There is nothing in his hell or the next
That will make me stop loving you
No matter how long eternity may be
xxx


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  • pwnd ur azz
    September 28
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    wow!!! this was amazing! good luck and thanx for your entry

  • CarnalNineTailedFox silver member
    July 3

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    i really found this poem original! great write! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox

  • Dazzle-Me-Darling silver member
    July 2

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    Wow this was incredible!
    Love the metaphors!
    This was really great!
    Good luck in the contest I hope you win!

  • Black-abyss
    July 2
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    OMG i love it Thanx 4 entering ^_^

  • kel dog
    June 30
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    i love it. its one of the best.

  • Voodoo Eyes
    June 30
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    This was very nice. I like your refrains. Thanks for enteing!


  • Shancy Fayre
    June 20
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    I like this. It really works. Dark and mysterious. Shancy.

  • piccola gold member
    June 3

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    normally I don't care for repetition even though I know it is a poetic device I get bored...not in this case though. I like the rythem that this has. Thank you for entering
  • aidenspektor
    June 1
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    This is very well-written, deep, thoughtful, and touching. Nice write.

  • Sound of Madness
    May 15
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    This is a very pretty write, good luck in my contest, and the other one.

  • xCandieKissesx
    May 14

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    Wow! Lovin it! The imagery and flow were awesome. I like your style. You write with such expression and it's very compelling. I can tell! Stellar! Thaks for entering and good luck!

    + Jackie

  • SixStringDebauchery
    May 13

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    YAY!

    'Atta girl baby! That's your old style back and everything. I really really hope that this time the block has gone away. I love you soooo much.
    xxx

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