show me
what you feel
as if you
were a red and green
stoplight
let me know
what you think
as clearly as
traffic
the dead end
still doesn't have
anywhere to go
detour
is a long way
around
so i stop
and wait
for you to buckle
my seatbelt
avoid the mirror
look at me
speed
windows down
hand entwines
with mine
words never
mattered
Author notes
Just thinking on some thoughts that one thinks about when one's in love.
Option # 3 for the contest Everybody Loves Somebody
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Comments
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Ah yes!
Written like a young person who wants & thinks of love!
You brought me back many years & I felt young again. Thanks for that. That's always a refreshing experience, but I have to say, I'm glad to be where I am right now! 
Nice write & interesting the way you made those comparisons to driving. I have to say that my 'love' experiences drove me 
when I was young! 
Glad that's over! 
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Nice write.. lots of emotion in this
A great read!
Thanks for sharing -
Thank you for your submittal, good luck in my contest, Josie
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I really liked your first stanza and all your comparisons. It was such a cute poem, it described love perfectly. Thank you for entering my contest
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Hmmm thought provoking... i guess many people can relate to this.. nice one!!
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a nice write, seems like many can relate
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Interesting comparison, I liked it.
-GL in contest -
This was a great write. thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Appreciation!
Thank you for supporting The Poetic Bandits reading list by contributing this poem
~Lilac
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There's never any need for words when love is all-consuming ~ ah...that first flush/rush...ain't love grand?
Not quite with you on the title...especially when I got to your author's notes...but hey, that's not really a problem! Might just be me being dense!
Keep that pen moving!
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I love the metaphor with the traffic lights, a strong beautiful poem.
"words never mattered"
Perfectly expressed
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Thank you for sharing A pleasure to read again!
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This is beautiful I really like your author notes too - they just made me smile! I hope you do well in the contest, I like this poem - the short lines suit it well and the content is creative
Keep writing
Polly
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Oh Nice ~ I can see the traffic lights, green & red
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What about amber light or a four way stop sign? I enjoyed this poem very much. Keep up the good writing.
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