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Flavor Of The Week

 

The sweet aroma of your kiss
when you bring it to my lips
Like a sin I keep committing
I indulge in you

You take the words out of my mouth
Finishing sentences I don't dare complete
I thought we had it all
But life kicks me in the face
and says I'm wrong


What's revealed to me
is that I'm nothing but
your Monday man
I suffice your cravings
until the next day comes
Then comes along your Tuesday prick
Who you've got on a string
Should I call you puppetmaster from now on?


I can't believe you
After everything we've been through
and all the time invested into this relationship
You would treat me like this


You're selfish and greedy
and you don't care about me
You just want the sheets filled
with any man you see
And where I'm from, we have a name for that
Being a gentlman, I won't call you that

You make me sick, so leave
After all, I'm only
You're flavor of the week
 

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  • movedon
    July 26, 2008

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    Flavor of the week...my favorite song! I love the backround. A great bg for a great poem. Lovely write.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • xcoldxtruthx
    June 10, 2008
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    its like the song..kinda but not really


  • sOuL
    June 10, 2008
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    i am happy to read your nice poem
    enjoy .. the contest


  • 2lullabyhaven
    May 27, 2008
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    Wow, you let it go in this one hahahaha no frills hahaha beauty of expression rocks it lol


  • Death of the Author
    May 26, 2008

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    Some very nice lines in this, I think it is my favourite of yours that I have read so far. It's edgy and different, with rhymes interspersed. Very nicely written.

    I don't know whether you care about grammar/spelling, I know there are some on here who hate having mistakes pointed out and others who appreciate it. Let me know which you are (or whether you're indifferent haha) and I'd be happy just to correct a couple of places.

    Really good write, I enjoyed it.


  • JessTheRentyMess
    May 15, 2008

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    hmmm this is different. not exactly what i expected but okay. um the structure was entertaining, the poem had some edgy spots but it added to the poem. and i know from expirience how infuriating it is the be the flavor of the week. I was the sweet chocolate morsels until something else came along. and yes i said "thing" . thanks for entering.


  • Soft-Rain gold member
    May 14, 2008

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    This form is new to me but i must say i love it.
    The story is all to familar sad to say.
    Truely a great write.
    best wishes,
    lifetime


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 13, 2008

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    I love the structure of it!! And it is very well written!! You express emotions in this that I think a lot of us who have been in similar situations can identify with! The longing for someone but the bitterness they leave in your mouth!

    Excellent write!


  • warrior-eagle
    May 13, 2008

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    Oooh.
    I loved the background.
    And this is pretty good actually,
    the way you arranged it gives it more..flavor.

    ..Simply Me♥


  • Amana Araya Jabari
    May 13, 2008

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    wow I love the back ground and the whole feel of it. Yea I know how it is to be a flavor. Lets see I was vanilla I think.... YEa, the classic and favorite untill a new one came out like cake batter .......... any who I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!

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