I've read this over twenty times,
all I can say is that it rhymes,
and please forgive me for my crimes.
I'm sure I haven't got it right.
My comprehension's taken flight;
has fled in fear into the night.
My pride's been dealt a bloody facer!
Amphimacer? I just can't place her.
(I think I need a good eraser.)
I've not a clue what iamb means.
My trochee's lost betwixt betweens.
This sonnet's shot to smithereens!
Knight, your verse has slain me well.
I founder in poetic hell.
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A contest entry
- St George's Sonnets. by cricketjeff.
1000 points, ended May 27, 4 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Yes, you didn't get the meter right, but you had me laughing fit to burst, which is good
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I enjoyed this a lot, needs some work on the meter but great fun to read, I hope you try this form again I think you can do great things with it.
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This was adorable!!! A very skillful penning... best of luck to you in the contest! I think it should do well!!
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I enjoyed this, the rhymes are cute when they are not fantastic. The first lines should start with a strong beat, but the iambs are great (statements notwithstanding). I like metapoems; good luck.
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Outstanding!
This is just outstanding! I love it! Great rhyme, great fun, great write!!!
best wishes in your contest.
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Excellent! Bravo. Kudos and standing ovations. I love it.
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I love it! This is fantastic! You took Mairi's form and made it your own! Bravo! Bravo! Bravo!
Love,
Amera
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Your rhyme in here flows smoothly and this is so adorable ~ best of luck in the contest
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