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Things i do

i drink
i eat
i sleep

trying to get rid of the pain within

I cry
I talk
I scream

Trying to tell people around me i'm not ok

I laugh
I smile
I give

Trying to trick myself that life is good

I lie
I cut
I kill

Trying to keep myself sane

Yea i dont write so w/e

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  • vega
    May 15, 2008

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    I some times feel the same way...
    heh people call me emo.
    But any way this is a good poem!!
    I give it two thoms up!! LOLZZZ


  • Bewicked
    May 13, 2008
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    I feel ya


  • SlashBabe
    May 13, 2008

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    Choose a better background.

    It's good but I would make it a little more obvious which stanzas go with which. I had to double back to figure that out, and it made me forget the smoothness that your trying to weave for a sec.

    The idea is stellar.


  • o.OErashtorO.o
    May 13, 2008

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    OMG, I love this!!!!! I love how you wrote it and how it's set up. This poem can describe a lot of feelings and it's to the point. I like it a lot!!!!!