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Thought You Cared

I told you I didn't feel well
you just told me okay
I thought maybe you just didn't understand
I clarified
I told you I was depresed
You just nodded and looked away
I thought maybe you just didn't understand
I clarified
I explained that I was contemplating suicide
you just shrugged and said all right
I thought maybe you just didn't understand
I clarified
I let you know about the voice telling me
that they wanted me dead

I felt pressure behind my eyes
I felt the tears begin to drip
I thought you would have understood
I thought you would have helped

I heard the voices
Whispers
Cackles
Hisses
Evil laughs
Telling me to jump off the roof
Telling me you didn't care
Telling me I'd be better off dead

I started walking towards the roof
You just looked and shook your head
I told you I was gonna jump
You just said I knew better
I climbed through the third floor window
you didn't even budge

I thought that you would help me
I thought that you would save me from myself
I thought you would protect me

The voices egged me on
I jumped

A broken leg, rib, and collar bone later
You said i was too much to handle
you sent me away to a hospital

I thought you cared

Author notes

Alice

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  • Living-Nightmare
    December 9, 2008

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    *speechless*

    I love this poem
    it reminds me alot about me.
    because thats how i feel when i talk and the one person i would talk to acted just like that, pretty much clueless about what was going on.
    sad but true.
    Fantastic write keep it up


  • miss keara
    May 19, 2008
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    I really like it.

    There's hardly a poem that has interested me as much as this one has
    <3
    It's brilliant, and relateable.
    Nice work!
    ;D
    ♥Me


  • anawarfare
    May 16, 2008

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    wow...
    this is insanely intense and amazing!!
    your a very talented writer!! it's very easy to relate to!!! i totally agree with AliceInTheRealWorld!! good luck on the contest

  • AliceInTheRealWorld
    May 15, 2008

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    Oh wow, this is not only intesne but so very easy to relate to and surpasses wonder, thank you for entering.

  • naughtygirl1
    May 13, 2008
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    this poem goes deep! it shows how he pushed you. I like it

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