Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

the sweetness....

Missing image
Oh God

what else can I do
except to neglect your
non-resonant tracings

where you profiled
the full moon
and twinkling luminaries
in the sky

since the sweetness of a
femininity seized me for the
love making

Oh God...

A contest entry

[Reward: double points]

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression? • Line numbers
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?) (Line numbers)

Comments

1 - 5 of 5

  • Room without doors silver member
    July 22

    Edit | Reply

    Excellent

    I thought this was sensual with a well developed theme. I really liked the third stanza which is full of rich imagery. This poem is full of intensity and speaks out.

    . Rewarded 4


  • rhondasail
    May 13

    Edit | Reply
    What else could you do?...Interesting question...and an interesting poem filled with suggestion, but not overdone...just the perfect touch of hinted sensuality...a very nice fit for the contest. Luck be with you, Rhonda

  • ashjoe76
    May 13

    Edit | Reply

    :)

    genuine feelings that could evoke a similar response from readers. the style and alignment makes it all the more intriguing a read. congrats and best regards!


  • perfectsunset
    May 13

    Edit | Reply
    This was beautifully written with such a lovely sensuality & thoughts of passion embracing within your words. Very original & lovely take on the prompt.

    Thank you for entering & best of luck

  • Pisces rainbow
    May 13

    Edit | Reply

    always such sincerity and love in writes.

    such beautiful imagery. just lovely.

    God bless...

1 - 5 of 5