Embryonic cries,
call out from the grave,
from the son I never knew,
the son I could not save.
May 16, 2008...,
on this day he would be two,
had he survived that tragic crash,
there'd be much that we could do.
A little confused I was,
when I first heard the news,
I was going to be a father,
could I fill those great big shoes?
Just as I'd grasped the concept,
then the ultrasound revealed,
a healthy baby boy was growing,
my son, my dream...surreal.
I'd imagined in my mind,
the kind of dad that I would be.
I'd teach him how to fish and camp,
he'd be so proud of me.
Would he follow in my footsteps,
would he want to be like me?
I imagined what he'd look like,
from his head down to his feet.
His mom and I weren't doing great,
yet we were working to make ammends.
For this precious child, that we both made,
atleast we could be friends.
Then came the terrible news,
I'll never forget that day.
When a tragic accident,
took my son away.
Dependant upon his mother,
and her nurturing umbilical tie,
when the last breath left her body,
my son was doomed to die.
I fell down on my knees and wept,
for the son I'd never know,
for the life he'd never live...
into a man he'd never grow.
In my heart and mind,
still he'll always be.
May 16th, will be his birthday,
please celebrate with me.
I'll keep his memory alive,
and upon my God-son, I will dote,
I'll teach him to fish and camp,
take him riding on a boat.
So, to the son I never knew,
on the day you should be two.
May 16, 2008...Happy Birthday Son,
in memory of you!
A contest entry
- Hush Little Baby by PoeticusVeritas.
1900 points, ended May 16, 23 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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This actually brought me to tears.
Wonderful write,
your words are beautiful
as is the rhythm and structure of your poems.
All the best -
Britty
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Beautiful and Bittersweet
Thank you for sharing this. I am so sorry for your lose, I lost a baby myself to miscarriage so I know somewhat what you are going through. This could very well have been something my husband would have felt and/or written if he was creative . But, seriously I feel your pain but very differently as it was me who lost the child. We feel certain it was a girl. I found out I was pregnant the about the same time I lost it. I'd tell you more but it's a long story and you may not want to hear it. Again I am sorry for your lose and I know Jesus is watching over I respective lost babies. Keep the faith.
. Rewarded 8
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tragic and touching. The heartfelt emotion leaps off the page. Communicates the loss to the reader with great effect. Excellent write.
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Very Very touching. It's so sad. But yet, happens to so many people. My aunt is a victim of a story similar to this. She lost her unborne child four years ago after falling down her front steps. It was something so dramatic, and so unsuspected.
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very touching
This poem made me cry because I am a mother and have 2 beautiful children I could never imagine the pain that I would feel if I ever lost anyone of them, I dont get to see them every day because their father and I are divorced and it hurts me because my children are my world. In no way am I trying to compare my pain to yours, but your poem has touched me and I am sorry for the loss of your child.
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A very powerfully emotional write. The death of a child must be the greatest tragedy of all.
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so sad yet so beautiful
ok i have to admit i rarely feel like crying at poems but this ripped my heart out. It was so beautiful and full of feelings. It was the kind of poem you rarely find, full of the pure emotions that we keep within us.
thank you so much for sharing it with us.
It was so beautiful.
holly xxx
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Congratulations on the gold, very well deserved. A very emotional and heart felt poem.
Thank you for sharing this with us...Sue
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Breathtaking.
Happy birthday, little manchild. Your father loves you and shares his soul with the world on your behalf on this special day.
Congratulations on this win, I have a feeling this one will mean everything. Blessed Be.
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Wow
I would think this was myself writing this poem. You ahve described every little detail of emotion I felt and eveything I went through. I cant even begin to think of any way of correcting this. I really am speachless. All I can say is thank you
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Though I thank you for the trophy, this write for me wasn't about the trophy or the points. I felt compelled to write, some uncanny connection to your contest and the tragic loss of your child, it was as if I was there, feeling your pain and grieving with you, I also feel there is a strong bond between you and your god-son, he was placed in your life to help fill that awful void. I couldn't stop writing for you, is why I entered twice, and even then couldn't stop thinking about your loss. You are in my heart and prayers,
may your life be blessed and enriched with love and happiness.
Blessings
Sassy
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Very sad but good.
Very good write. It touched my heart.
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Very touching
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thank you
Sassy
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