Embryonic cries,
call out from the grave,
from the son I never knew,
the son I could not save.
May 16, 2008...,
on this day he would be two,
had he survived that tragic crash,
there'd be much that we could do.
A little confused I was,
when I first heard the news,
I was going to be a father,
could I fill those great big shoes?
Just as I'd grasped the concept,
then the ultrasound revealed,
a healthy baby boy was growing,
my son, my dream...surreal.
I'd imagined in my mind,
the kind of dad that I would be.
I'd teach him how to fish and camp,
he'd be so proud of me.
Would he follow in my footsteps,
would he want to be like me?
I imagined what he'd look like,
from his head down to his feet.
His mom and I weren't doing great,
yet we were working to make ammends.
For this precious child, that we both made,
atleast we could be friends.
Then came the terrible news,
I'll never forget that day.
When a tragic accident,
took my son away.
Dependant upon his mother,
and her nurturing umbilical tie,
when the last breath left her body,
my son was doomed to die.
I fell down on my knees and wept,
for the son I'd never know,
for the life he'd never live...
into a man he'd never grow.
In my heart and mind,
still he'll always be.
May 16th, will be his birthday,
please celebrate with me.
I'll keep his memory alive,
and upon my God-son, I will dote,
I'll teach him to fish and camp,
take him riding on a boat.
So, to the son I never knew,
on the day you should be two.
May 16, 2008...Happy Birthday Son,
in memory of you!
Author notes
This poem was written for Poeticus Veritas and dedicated to the memory of his son who died before he was born. His baby died when the mother was in a tragic car accident that took her life, she was 5 mos. pregnant. Poeticus had just spoken to her the day before and found out that their baby would be a little boy. The above pic is a picture of his godson, whom he has loved and cared for as if he was his own
He is a member here at ap, and I'm sure he would love to hear from you. http://allpoetry.com/poeticusveritas
A contest entry
- Hush Little Baby by SomeonesToySoldier.
1900 points, ended May 16, 2008, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is heartbreaking; I can't believe taht you wrote it for a friend after hearing about his experiences for it sounsd so personal, as though you yourself were the father in those shoes; you did an amazing job of setting yourself into that place, as though it were your own son. Bravo.
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This is so sad!!! I feel your pain in this write!!! This is very personal but inspirational!!! Thank you for sharing!!! You did a beautiful job with this!!! Your word choice is excellent!! I LOVE IT!! The picture is very sweet!!
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Your poem brought tears to my eyes. It's a beautiful trubute for your friend. I lost one of my babies very early in my pregnancy and that was hard enugh. I can only imagine how much worse it would have been that far along or if I didn't have one twin to hold on to. Very touching.
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I am so sorry for your loss, and you are blessed that you have a healthy child. I believe that there is a reason for all things that happen in our lives, including tragedies. Though it is hard for us to see through the pain, and our minds are shallow unto God, but he has a reason for all things that occur, good and bad.
(okay, sorry for that little tangent I just went on thank you for your comment and
Blessings to you and your loved ones,
Sassy
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as I read... and re-read this sad tale I am forever touched by the pain that you feel with this loss. I can't help but try and give you comfort. Just remember that you are among friends here. Hugs
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thank you so much for your heartfelt comment, comfort and hugs
Blessings,
Sassy
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This is such a beautiful and heartfelt
poem that you have written here. A lovely
tribute to your friend and fellow poet here.
Congratulations to you on this well deserved
Gold trophy! Thanks so much for sharing your
heart here and keep up the wonderful work!
Jeremy0826
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thank you Jeremy
Blessings to you
Sassy
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This is such a beautifully written poem, written sincerely from the heart. Wowww! the pain, made my heart drop and I got that really gutted feeling inside of me. So very sad indeed.
I would like to leave you with a thought from the scriptures that may bring some comfort to your friend. I just could not walk away without sharing Gods promise for the future. It is taken from;
NIV
Revelation 21:4,5
4 He [God] will wipe every tear from their eyes. There will be no more death or mourning or crying or pain, for the old order of things has passed away.
5 He who was seated on the throne said, "Write this down for these words are trustworthy and true."
God himself promises to give us our loved ones back in perfect health, do I beleive this? yes.
This is why I have shared it, to give a comfort and a hope for the future.
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thank you so much for such a beautiful, inspiring comment
Blessings,
Sassy
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This is a beauitifully wonder sad poem. The imagery jsut bleeds through to me. I can definitely relate to this poem even tho I have never lost a child. You make me feel this lost so very much with your words. This is definitely a wonderful write. Thanks for sharing.
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Beautifully done
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wow
Life is never what we think it will be, that is for sure. All the reason to treasure it so much more. Very well written.
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"yet we were working to make ammends.
For this precious child, that we both made,
atleast we could be friends"
this is the line that touched me the most... that two people who were not in love, would put their anger.... hurt aside to be friends and be able to raise their child together...
I am sad for this loss.. not only of the child but of the mother also... two lives should be mourned.... I can understand this pain... and hope that your friend has healed from this loss... and that just because he never held his son... he is still that childs father.. and always will be...
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how sad this is i have had friends that have lost loved ones this way ,it happens all to often im deeply sorry for your loss my friend,as i to know this feeling from losing children to miscarriages but god has blessed me with two wonderful kids of my own as well as two stepkids ,may god bless you in the same way,i hope someday soon he'll bless you and let you become the dad you always wanted to be to your precious son,you never knew god bless you for sharing and good luck in contest mary
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I am sorry, they will tell you it takes twenty years to get over this. You neve do "They" are lying.
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this was written in memory of the loss of Poeticus Veritas' son, who died before he was born. His mom was in a tragic car accident that took both their lives when she was 5 mos. pregnant.
Poeticus is a member here at ap...http://allpoetry.com/PoeticusVeritas
Blessings,
Sassy
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I am so very sorry for your loss.
Always keep him alive in your heart.
Someday you shall meet your son face to
face and I am sure he will tell you just
how proud he is of you, for writing this
most heartfelt poem for him and for never
forgetting him. I am sure he would have loved
to do all these things you write about in
your piece. You wrote some very beautiful words.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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this was written in memory of the loss of Poeticus Veritas' son, who died before he was born. His mom was in a tragic car accident that took both their lives when she was 5 mos. pregnant.
Poeticus is a member here at ap...http://allpoetry.com/PoeticusVeritas
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Yeah very GREAT..
It keeps me reading this.
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AMAZING...REALLY great...
GOOD..wOW..,.
I've been searching for poems like this!
Is this a true story??
men,It's great,Really. -
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this was written in memory of the loss of Poeticus Veritas' son, who died before he was born. His mom was in a tragic car accident that took both their lives when she was 5 mos. pregnant.
Poeticus is a member here at ap...http://allpoetry.com/PoeticusVeritas
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this was really sad. it brought me to tears. but its a great write though.
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OMG!! This was so tragic and full of bitter emotions. It was an amazing write and clearly from the heart. May that little angel of yours watch you from heaven as you keep his memory alive. Little kids that depart always become angels. It was so sad, I could hardly contain my tears... May you stay strong.
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this was written in memory of the loss of Poeticus Veritas' son, who died before he was born. His mom was in a tragic car accident that took both their lives when she was 5 mos. pregnant.
Poeticus is a member here at ap...http://allpoetry.com/PoeticusVeritas
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This actually brought me to tears.
Wonderful write,
your words are beautiful
as is the rhythm and structure of your poems.
All the best -
Britty
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Beautiful and Bittersweet
Thank you for sharing this. I am so sorry for your lose, I lost a baby myself to miscarriage so I know somewhat what you are going through. This could very well have been something my husband would have felt and/or written if he was creative . But, seriously I feel your pain but very differently as it was me who lost the child. We feel certain it was a girl. I found out I was pregnant the about the same time I lost it. I'd tell you more but it's a long story and you may not want to hear it. Again I am sorry for your lose and I know Jesus is watching over I respective lost babies. Keep the faith.
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tragic and touching. The heartfelt emotion leaps off the page. Communicates the loss to the reader with great effect. Excellent write.
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Very Very touching. It's so sad. But yet, happens to so many people. My aunt is a victim of a story similar to this. She lost her unborne child four years ago after falling down her front steps. It was something so dramatic, and so unsuspected.
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very touching
This poem made me cry because I am a mother and have 2 beautiful children I could never imagine the pain that I would feel if I ever lost anyone of them, I dont get to see them every day because their father and I are divorced and it hurts me because my children are my world. In no way am I trying to compare my pain to yours, but your poem has touched me and I am sorry for the loss of your child.
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A very powerfully emotional write. The death of a child must be the greatest tragedy of all.
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so sad yet so beautiful
ok i have to admit i rarely feel like crying at poems but this ripped my heart out. It was so beautiful and full of feelings. It was the kind of poem you rarely find, full of the pure emotions that we keep within us.
thank you so much for sharing it with us.
It was so beautiful.
holly xxx
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Congratulations on the gold, very well deserved. A very emotional and heart felt poem.
Thank you for sharing this with us...Sue
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Breathtaking.
Happy birthday, little manchild. Your father loves you and shares his soul with the world on your behalf on this special day.
Congratulations on this win, I have a feeling this one will mean everything. Blessed Be.
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Wow
I would think this was myself writing this poem. You ahve described every little detail of emotion I felt and eveything I went through. I cant even begin to think of any way of correcting this. I really am speachless. All I can say is thank you
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Though I thank you for the trophy, this write for me wasn't about the trophy or the points. I felt compelled to write, some uncanny connection to your contest and the tragic loss of your child, it was as if I was there, feeling your pain and grieving with you, I also feel there is a strong bond between you and your god-son, he was placed in your life to help fill that awful void. I couldn't stop writing for you, is why I entered twice, and even then couldn't stop thinking about your loss. You are in my heart and prayers,
may your life be blessed and enriched with love and happiness.
Blessings
Sassy
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Very sad but good.
Very good write. It touched my heart.
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Very touching
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thank you
Sassy
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