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Glue

i said i feel like you
riped my heart out
and tore it to pices
You asked if i wanted some glue
i resoponded wiht no hesitation
no i just want you!
( its not done yet but i have to go to 2nd period PEACE)

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  • aeolia
    October 5, 2008
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    riped -- ripped
    pices -- pieces
    resoponded -- responded
    wiht -- with

    This, along with the cliched ideas of your 'poetry,' is why we don't rush poems. Let the idea brew for a while -- at least that's what I do -- and take the time to write and improve them. Write on paper in class, if you have to. This isn't art; it's bromidic scribbling.

    -hiraeth