i cared for you, i cherished you
i listened to you, i loved you
you told me you loved me
told me you cared
gave you all i had
gave you my world
but in the end it wasn't enough
you've found someone new
and now im gone and all i can say is
enough is enough
Author notes
i just wrote this now... sorta self explanatory... my girl found a new guy lol... this is really bad and i prob shouldnt even post it but i cant write much latly so i thought i would put something up even if its bad... go as hard as you want at it, might help me write more. thanks
A contest entry
- PIF QUICKIE... 40-60 WORDS 10 POETS by righteousme.
625 points, ended May 17, 2008, 6 entries
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this is a really heartbreaking poem, the girl is clearly an idiot for hurting you so much and clearly didnt appreciate what she had.
I can't imagine what you went through with this, but I hope you came out of it in the end ok...
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short and [bitter]sweet. strong emotion in so little space. i really love this and im so sorry you had to go through an experience like that but it just goes to show that any thing especially experience can be inspiration for a work of art ^^
nice work
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im sorry for your loss.. but know that for every loss there will be a win... open your eyes and look for it... thanks so much for your time and talent... AiM
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nice you write, its been a while since you put anything new up, hope it goes awesome in the contest!
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Thank you for posting this and sharing your feelings with us. Writing and sharing help so much with the recovery process. Your words peirce me and make me sad (in a good way ) Good luck in the contest!
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ahhh the tell old tale of loving someone who doesnt care all they want is someone else. it sure does suck
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