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Veiled Sunlight


Veiled sunlight
filters past my eyes
as dawn moves
across the horizon,

Sorrows lost to
red fire searing
a place into my soul
faithless wandering
leads to empty dreams
and blind faith leads
you no where,

Blackend roads
of broken light
wail against the
rising of the tide
and we waste away into
nothingness.

But for that moment,
that second, into when
we stare at the dawn
and are whole again-

Author notes

copyright 2006
this is an older one of mine.

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  • raggyann
    October 21

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    i feel like this some time
    i think you put alot into writting this poem
    it has alot of emotion behiind it
    and also alot of images
    i would not change a word in this poem you wrote it well


  • GoodCarMa
    July 17, 2008

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    Just like life, you begin with hope... travel through life's trials and tribulations, only to awaken to a new day... a new dawn... and hope and wholeness once again reign. Just call me a sucker... I like happy endings... lol...

    There is nothing like a sunrise or a sunset that inspires awe, oneness with all creation and all kinds of warm fuzzies. They are temporal, but when the mind basks in the glow the power can last into the infinite.

    Can you tell I'm more content oriented than form oriented?


  • jogn
    May 31, 2008

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    Forgive me

    Doesn't flow well. Couldn't find the message.
    Good luck in the contest. I'll look foolish when you win.


  • Lone Defender
    May 19, 2008
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    Very nice...works great with the background and color theme, too. Thanks for entering.


  • sailor ptolema
    May 15, 2008
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    very beautiful! you capture a wonderful picture of dawn!!!


  • LionessK gold member
    May 13, 2008

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