With such simple motion and Shakesperian devotion
this art could charm desire
and through the illusion we reach the conclusion
someone here is a liar.
Though that is the problem when you are dreaming
writing words then giving them meaning
trying to escape the blame.
this art could charm desire
and through the illusion we reach the conclusion
someone here is a liar.
Though that is the problem when you are dreaming
writing words then giving them meaning
trying to escape the blame.
Author notes
This was written whilst I was on my way home from a trip to see a friend of mine, that's about all I want to say, the rest you should figure out, if not I need to work on the poem. I'm trying to make my poems understandable to all, its my objective right now. Like I say though, if you really want to know, IM me and ask, I'll tell you then.
A contest entry
- 7/15 Quickie. by A peine Ici.
425 points, ended May 15, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
No specific question, just go AWOL on me, tell me whatever you think or ask me anything about it.
Comments
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i really like the deep feelings you have put into this poem i love the thoughts, this poem also flows well with the nice ryhme also, keep up the great writing ~Amy

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I love it.
very well done
Though that is the problem when you are dreaming
writing words then giving them meaning
trying to escape the blame.
-These being my favourite lines, probably because of the creating-then-giving sense notion (that's pretty much the way it works out for me).
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very good
never figured that by dreaming one can escape blame
cool idea
have to figure that out
but wish you a harmless escape
but loved your wording
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Wow, that's all I have to say. This definitely wowed me. I can't claim to understand it perfectly though but sometimes you just understand the good things in life




