With such simple motion and Shakesperian devotion
this art could charm desire
and through the illusion we reach the conclusion
someone here is a liar.
Though that is the problem when you are dreaming
writing words then giving them meaning
trying to escape the blame.
Author notes
This was written whilst I was on my way home from a trip to see a friend of mine, that's about all I want to say, the rest you should figure out, if not I need to work on the poem. I'm trying to make my poems understandable to all, its my objective right now. Like I say though, if you really want to know, IM me and ask, I'll tell you then.
A contest entry
- 7/15 Quickie. by A peine Ici.
425 points, ended May 15, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
No specific question, just go AWOL on me, tell me whatever you think or ask me anything about it.
Comments
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i really like the deep feelings you have put into this poem i love the thoughts, this poem also flows well with the nice ryhme also, keep up the great writing ~Amy
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I love it.
very well done
Though that is the problem when you are dreaming
writing words then giving them meaning
trying to escape the blame.
-These being my favourite lines, probably because of the creating-then-giving sense notion (that's pretty much the way it works out for me).
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very good
never figured that by dreaming one can escape blame
cool idea
have to figure that out
but wish you a harmless escape
but loved your wording
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Wow, that's all I have to say. This definitely wowed me. I can't claim to understand it perfectly though but sometimes you just understand the good things in life
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