I have nothing left
As I play this melody
A reminder of my life
Every note, a memory
Everything around me is gone
Everyone in my life now done
It's clear it was me, I'm the one
Who made all this happen, times begun
Having nothing but memories left
How is it possible to move on
I stand here playing, emotionless
Wondering what's really wrong
Maybe I just don't wanna give in
Heart refusing rejection
Mind not accepting change
Locked in tragic memories
Am I suppose to accept this pain?
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie Pic/Quote Prompt Option contest:) by bella-babie.
475 points, ended May 24, 9 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow.... that is all i have to say... wow...
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Wow this was so beautiful and powerful emotion pouring from within. Reminds me of something personal. I really love how you formed your thoughts and ended the poem with a question.. leaving me to ponder and ponder.
Amazing write!
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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so vivid
The words seems to flow and speak of the point where I am at right, not wanting to accept, not undering in a place I'd never thought I be. your words are if my own. You wrie wonderful and able to convery so much in what and how your wrote, really nice piece.
Image and Visions
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I <3 it
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Wow, i loved it. i really loved the lines
It's clear it was me, I'm the one
Who made all this happen, times begun
because i really feel that i can relate to these lines and the last line is a question i often ask myself.
XXCrimsonRaineXX
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it's really good, but are you really filled with such pain and sadness?because if so, then maybe someone can help you through it...but, it's really good, and I love it!!
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WoW You'll win for sure
My favorite lines are
"I have nothing left
As I play this melody
A reminder of my life
Every note, a memory"
Comparing your life to a song, very nice
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Confuzzled1
This is really Great Dear Thanks for sharing
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wow, i really love this. it's powerful in all its beauty and haunting in a way. it's sad but oh so beautiful and has a great flow. well written and a great piece. good luck in the contest.
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Really nice, fluid rhymes that aren't too noticeable, but not too subtle. The recurring word memories really put a haunting feel into the poem, and the question that went unanswered at the end was sad =( but you got feelings across very well
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
A+wesome
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My fist impression is the first stanza. It' catchy and symbolic. I like a lot. And on the last line, a sign of motion is made. B-E-A-Utiful! xx
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This is really good! I can really relate to what you are saying. I love the rhythm and rhyme, it flows well!!
Also, great take on the prompt! I feel it fits perfectly!! The only thing I have a question about is your punctuation...did you leave out periods on purpose?
GREAT write!!! Thank you so much for having me read this!
Leslie
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very well pictured. loved the matephoric way youve laid it in with music.. great job!
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WOW
thats rly good!! what the significance for it??
xoxo
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wow!
this is really powerful and went perfect with the picture. my fav lines are "Maybe I just don't wanna give in
Heart refusing rejection
Mind not accepting change" cuz it describes me kinda. Ever since my xbf broke my heart i havent been able to just give in and let my heart love another and my mind doesnt let me act differently. good job with this
christina
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Hey this is good. You got a great form, it fits in rhyme and rythem. You tell how she is feeling and little details about her life. I like how it fits. Overall I would give it a 95% (if only because I want to read more!) I wish you luck in the contest!
~Kystal Angel
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This is beautiful! I love it. I've felt that before. Its so awesome!
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"I stand here playing, emotionless
Wondering what's really wrong
Maybe I just don't wanna give in
Heart refusing rejection
Mind not accepting change
Locked in tragic memories"
Rather nicely penned; thanks for sharing this with me. Your poem fits the picture provided and flows rather well. The stanzas above were my favourites -- nice choice of words and everything. Also, last line really gives it closure.
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nice....sad but nice and it flows so well awesome job. ur poetry is so well done its just....wow thats the only word i've got for it. gd luck in the contest!
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