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Rhythmic highest of highs.

I play these strings
dance upon them in a raging desire

                                                     of fire.

‘These notes and bars are
shared, only with you’

We dwell within my music
every stroke, you’re drawn in more.
Not to me,
but my world.

Almost vicious,
my movements in this game
of hypnotizing you with rhythmic;
highest of the highs.
Your smile confirms each note is seeping
deep,
grabbing at

                  your heart.

Author notes

Went with inspiration from the picture musically inclined (violin etc) and told a story of love aswell

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  • wendymolly
    June 1, 2008

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    I loved This! Very fluid! Rolls right of the rhytmic mind! And for that you are a well deserved Contest finalist! take care,
    ~pithyAplomb.


  • reymysterio
    May 27, 2008
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    Your poem is great and wonderful it is agreat piece of writing well done good luck.


  • kavi22
    May 14, 2008

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    I love this poem. I play a string instrument too, the Viola, and I love it. I also like how this poem can be talking about more then one thing, it takes a lot of talent to do that. Good job!


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      May 14, 2008
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      Hey cool..I dont play one actually..I play the organ and piano, so I am musiclly inclined ..easy to relate things to another instrument to create the atmosphere etc

      Thank you so much, such kind and uplifting comment, much appreciaated


      CIndy


  • Mark McNulty
    May 13, 2008

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    This is really well written, Cindy, and well done. I must admit this pic throws me for a loop, so seeing such a fine poem produced from the image is impressive. Nice job building a musical feel into it, too... at least for me.


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      May 13, 2008
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      It threw me a tiny bit at first...the this thought of I play these strings for you got in my head and I ran with it...I think the love factor...probably helped it come easier
      hehehe

      Thanks Mark


  • perfectsunset gold member
    May 13, 2008

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    Wow this was so beautifully penned & you definately captured the picture's true essence. These lines struck me most

    "We dwell within my music
    every stroke, you’re drawn in more.
    Not to me,
    but my world."

    I love the dual meaning of that; stroke being a stroke of the violin, but at the same time could refer to a gentle stroke of her skin..drawing her love in more deeply, with both strokes...

    Amazing write!!! Thanks for entering & best of luck


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      May 13, 2008
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      Man how did ya spot my double entondra( yeah no idea how to spell that word lol )

      I do that from time to time..give something a double meaning...on the odd occasion I do it without noticing too lol.

      Your so right...I did intend that..specially when I added but my world


      SO glad you like this one, as I really couldnt have loved writing it more then I did and do lol



      Cin

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