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Blue Eyes.

The fickle skies may steal the years
Hiding them away, from mortal eyes
Time takes its toll, on the elegant beauty
As colour seeps from lives

Personality dominates the future
An abundance of characteristics,
A shining glimpse into the depths of a soul
The windows of shimmering topaz

Regardless of the marks of time
One window remains
Blue Eyes.

A contest entry

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  • Argon1442
    May 16

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    this is a really great piece that could have many different meanings. i love the adjectivies used and the way that you used words. nice work!

  • AliceinPoetryLand Moderators member
    May 15

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    Yes I love you last three lines as well, but I loved the whole piece. Beautiful imagery and flow.
    Thanks so much for your entry
    Gaylene

  • Margaret Denham gold member
    May 13

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    Regardless of the marks of time
    One window remains
    Blue Eyes.

    These lines really captured my attention and summed up the entire poem so well.

    Best of luck in the contest.

    Margaret