There in the softening of twilight
I bathed ~
bare skin
inhaling the scent of May
somewhere untouched by man.
The sapphire sky strolled gently down
towards my world
with the moon tucked beneath her soul
and I watched as the horizon shyly kissed the nape of spring
falling quietly into my ocean...
Author notes
Paradise
A contest entry
- Tease Me by StormGoddess.
700 points, ended May 17, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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This is absolutely beautiful. Holds such a hidden degree of sensuality. Love the imagery. The whole thing is well written. Thank you for entering and good luck. Storm
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Amazing - this is so soft and sensual, one can feel the calm on the ocean as it washes through every word.
Very well written.
DragonSong
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Simply stunning
"falling quietly into my ocean..."
Loved this ending--serene yet intriguing at the same time...great word choices here!!
Once again, great personification and verb choices--it seems so effortless for you and I'm in awe..
Love your word choices: e.g. twilight, sapphire, horizon, nape =]
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Sigh... how very uplifting this is!! I imagined being there in that scene and feeling utterly at peace!
Stunning
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